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Some people think that University students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give yo v.3

Some people think that University students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. 3
Life is full of choices and no one should be denied the right to choose whatever they want especially when it comes to what to study at the University. Unfortunately, many think that undergraduates should only be allowed to undertake science and technology based courses because of their future prospects. Every student envisage a good job upon graduation, in order not to have their hope dashed, some people advise that students should take up courses that guarantee this expectation. According to them all tertiary institution courses do not weigh the same in the labour market. Apart from in-demand jobs, they believe that the assurance of a well paying employment at the end of University life will spur the students to put in their best in academics so as to come out in flying colours. A good grade in such a high grade course will make the job come even faster. A good job at the end of studies is a " good enough reason" but let us look at the big picture. The place of passion in studying a course and of course job is very important. People that follow their hearts in choosing a subject of study have that inner drive that see them through. The zeal will eventually pay off in their studies. In the labour market, self drive is what get the job done not just the good grades and subject of studies. In addition, those that study their choice course have been proven to contribute more to their organizations. To them it is not just about the pay, it is their life, it is what they believe in. To conclude, it is best to allow people choose their path of study in institutions of higher learning as the passion they have for the course will not only make the studies worthwhile but also assure a pleasurable work-life in future
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be denied
the right to choose whatever they want
especially
when it
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at the University. Unfortunately,
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think
that undergraduates should
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be
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allowed
to undertake science and technology based
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courses
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because
of their future prospects.

Every student
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a
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good
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job
upon graduation, in order not to have their hope dashed,
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some
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people
advise that students should take up
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courses
that guarantee this expectation. According to them all tertiary institution
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courses
do not weigh the same in the
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market. Apart from in-demand
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jobs
, they believe that the assurance of a well paying employment at the
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end
of University life will spur the students to put in their best in academics
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so as to
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come
out in flying
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colours
. A
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good
grade in such a high grade
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course
will
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make
the
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job
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come
even faster.

A
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at the
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of
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studies
is a
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good
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enough
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us look at the
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picture. The place of passion in studying a
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course
and of
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course
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job
is
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very
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.
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People
that follow their hearts in choosing a subject of
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study
have that inner drive that
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see
them through. The zeal will
eventually
pay off in their
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studies
. In the
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labour
market, self drive is what
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get
the
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job
done not
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just
the
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good
grades and subject of
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studies
.
In addition
, those that
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study
their choice
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course
have
been proven
to contribute more to their organizations. To them it is not
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just
about the pay, it is their life, it is what they believe in.

To conclude
, it is best to
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allow
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people
choose their path of
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study
in institutions of higher learning as the passion they have for the
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course
will not
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only
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make
the
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studies
worthwhile
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but
also
assure a pleasurable work-life in future
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that University students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
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