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some people think that tradition and cultures should not be preserved but some think they need to be preserved .discuss both the view

some people think that tradition and cultures should not be preserved but some think they need to be preserved. discuss both the view YmNMn

Many argue that in the recent times new generation has no interest in protecting and maintaining their old ways of living because these are outdated and do not go well with present word. While others hold a view that these are essential for human beings to stay connected with values of elders. I agree with the later point of sentence, they teach us how to respect old vulnerable people. I will discuss both the views in following paragraph. On the one hand, some believe that conventional lifestyle does not match with modern world, because it is extremally outdated. Because everything today revolves around technology. So it is not easy to merge both of them. Furthermore, it also makes thinking enormously reserved and old mode. For example, a person who goes to church daily and blindly trust god do not believe in hard work and want to achieve it through prayers and without any efforts. However, I still think that culture and values are vital part of living beings and provide us peace of mind. As per as my opinion, I tradition plays a crucial role in teaching a youngsters about how to respect their ancestors. Because values and ethics run in the generations like we learn from our parents and they learn it from our grandparents. In addition to it, new generation also attain knowledge about history how people scarifies their lives for country and in this way we develop sense of respect toward them. For instance, developed countries have decided initiate a school programs where they will be tell about the their nations history, and how people in old times use to live. To conclude, Although it does not much beneficial in other aspects of life like business, or mechanization but conventional ways are necessary in order to develop a good, humble, and respectful citizen of nation.

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 mode. For example
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As per as my opinion, Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'I'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
I tradition
 plays a crucial role in teaching Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a youngster" or simply "youngsters"?a youngsteryoungsters
a youngsters
 about how to respect their ancestors. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
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 they learn it from our grandparents. In addition
 to it, new generation also
 attain knowledge about history how This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 for country and in this way we develop sense of respect toward them. For instance
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :developed nationscountries with a strong economyindustrialized nation
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 have decided initiate a school programs where they will be Consider using the past participle "told"?told
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the their nations
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people
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 times Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".used to
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.

To conclude
, Although it does not much beneficial in other aspects of life like business, or mechanization This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 conventional ways are necessary in order to develop a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
, humble, and respectful citizen of nation. 