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Some people think that there should be a complete ban on all forms of advertising

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Advertising is a common way for companies to introduce their latest product to the market which is an easy and effective way ti impress customers and make the product more intriguing. Yet, there are some opinions consider that advertising should completely be banned. Personally, I believe that this action will have an large impact on world economic. Advertising product through television or youtubr is a common ways to reach the viewers and consumers, which increase the amount of item sold out market and increase the reputation of the company. To illustrate, McDonald and Burger King are two well-known company for their fast and delicious food such as burger and fried product. Bring the item on is media also an effective way for people, who have the demand of product that can solve their recent problems but they don't know where to buy the thing. Television company can also make money from the contract of other company which have the demand of advertising their product. And if the idea is granted, it would be a disaster for the world market as so as companies because it would be difficult to universalise the product. Nontheless, overusing advertisement annoy people, they only feel the product is appealing at the first time they saw it but they would be annoy if the frequency of the product appears on screen is too much. For instance, some apps allow google to advertise the product under the main screen which make developer make more money but the user receive terrible experience when the advertisement keep pop up while they are using the app like cleaning, studying online apps. Youtube is also a company that make profits from advertising product on their app which sometime cause anger because the viewers experience is bad. To sum up, the opinion of forbidding all forms of advertising would dramatically decrase world market economy but people may have great experience with social networks as so as social media.
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companies
to introduce their latest
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product
to the
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market
which is an easy and effective way ti impress customers and
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make
the
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product
more intriguing.
Yet
, there are
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some
opinions consider that advertising should completely
be banned
.
Personally
, I believe that this action will have
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an
large impact on world economic. Advertising
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product
through television or
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youtubr
is a common
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ways
to reach the viewers and consumers, which increase the amount of item sold out
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market
and increase the reputation of the
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company
. To illustrate, McDonald and Burger King are two well-known
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company
for their
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fast
and delicious food such as burger and fried
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product
. Bring the item on is media
also
an effective way for
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people
, who have the demand of
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product
that can solve their recent problems
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but
they don't know where to
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buy
the thing. Television
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company
can
also
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make
money from the contract of other
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company
which have the demand of advertising their
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product
. And if the
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idea
is granted
, it would be a disaster for the world
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market
as
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so
as
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companies
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because
it would be difficult to
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universalise
the
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product
.
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, overusing advertisement annoy
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people
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feel the
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is appealing at the
first
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saw
it
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but
they would be
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annoy
if the frequency of the
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product
appears on screen is too much.
For instance
,
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some
apps
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google
to advertise the
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product
under the main screen which
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developer
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make
more money
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but
the user receive terrible experience when the advertisement
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keep
pop up while they are using the app like cleaning, studying online apps.
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Youtube
is
also
a
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company
that
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make
profits from advertising
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product
on their app which sometime cause anger
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because
the viewers experience is
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bad
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dramatically
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world
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market
economy
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people
may have great experience with social networks as
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as social media.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be a complete ban on all forms of advertising

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