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Some people think that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree.

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In our lives, we travel from one place to another for a great variety of reasons and while travelling we greatly depend on cars, whether it is a private car or a public bus. The number of car owners is increasing every day because every person expects the freedom to travel and comfort while travelling. And that is why most of us want to own a car. However owning a car have many advantages and disadvantages as well. The main advantage of owning a car is it gives the freedom to travel. If you have a car then you don't need to be limited to fixed routes and timetables. Moreover, a car-owner can take is/her family members with him/her and other necessary goods whenever he/she wish which might have been impossible otherwise. In addition, personal cars give comfort while travelling on the contrary to the public buses which are so crowded and disgusting. You can read books, listen to music or even can play with kids while you are in your own car but those all seem to be impossible in public transport. On the contrary, owning a car is very expensive. The price of the car, the cost of the tax, insurance cost, fuel cost, driver's salary, car repairing etc. all must be considered before buying a car and that is why it is out of reach of the middle-class people. Moreover, private cars can not carry many passengers at a time yet occupy spaces in the street. As the number of cars is increasing in the road so does the traffic jam. Perhaps the major disadvantage of cars, in general, is the huge damage they do to human health and to the environment. More cars mean more pollution. The environment pollution is a serious issue today and at any cost, we must reduce the amount of pollution and if we consider it then owning a car is never a good idea. To sum up, having a car gives someone freedom but if the public transportation system is easily accessible, safe and efficient, then the idea of buying and owning a car should be abandoned.
In our
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lives
, we travel from one place to another for a great variety of reasons and while travelling we
greatly
depend on
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cars
, whether it is a private
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car
or a
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public
bus. The number of
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car
owners is increasing every day
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because
every person
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expects
the freedom to travel and comfort while travelling. And
that is
why most of us want to
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own
a
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car
.
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However
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owning
a
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car
have
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many
advantages and disadvantages
as well
.

The main advantage of
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owning
a
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car
is it gives the freedom to travel. If you have a
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car
then you don't need to
be limited
to
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fixed
routes and timetables.
Moreover
, a car-owner can take is/her family members with him/her and other necessary
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goods
whenever he/she wish which might have been impossible
otherwise
.
In addition
, personal
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cars
give comfort while travelling
on the contrary
to the
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public
buses which are
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so
crowded and disgusting. You can read books, listen to music or even can play with kids while you are in your
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own
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car
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but
those all seem to be impossible in
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public
transport.
On the contrary
,
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owning
a
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car
is
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very
expensive. The price of the
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car
, the
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cost
of the tax, insurance
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cost
, fuel
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cost
, driver's salary,
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car
repairing etc. all
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must
be considered
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before
buying a
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car
and
that is
why it is out of reach of the middle-
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class
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people
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Moreover
, private
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cars
can not carry
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many
passengers at a time
yet
occupy spaces in the street. As the number of
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cars
is increasing in the road
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so
does the traffic jam. Perhaps the major disadvantage of
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cars
,
in general
, is the huge damage they do to human health and to the environment. More
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cars
mean more pollution. The environment pollution is a serious issue
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today
and at any
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cost
, we
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must
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reduce
the amount of pollution and if we consider it then
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owning
a
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car
is never a
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good
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idea
.

To sum up, having a
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car
gives someone freedom
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but
if the
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public
transportation system is
easily
accessible, safe and efficient, then the
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idea
of buying and
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owning
a
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car
should
be abandoned
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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