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some people think that the teenage years are the happiness times of most people 's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion? v.1

some people think that the teenage years are the happiness times of most people 's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 1
Nowadays, due to the availability of similar goods all over the world, most nations are looking alike. In my opinion, it is an adverse development as it leads to a rise in carbon emission and the destruction of various cultures. The most important reason why I believe the availability of the same products everywhere is a negative development is the increase in export. Countries all over the world are selling surplus goods to other countries these days. As a result of this, there is a tremendous increase in the carbon footprint. For example, flights are the most appropriate and fastest mode for transporting a product to a foreign country. Therefore, there is no doubt that an exotic Kiwi fruit exported from Australia to India leaves a huge amount of harmful gases in the environment. Another reason to disapprove of this trend is the loss of cultural diversity. In recent times, it is quite possible to transport clothes from one country to another country at a nominal cost. Due to this trend, the popularity of traditional clothes is decreasing. Traditional clothes are linked to the culture of a country. With easy access to exported clothes, people are avoiding conventional clothing of their home countries. Consequently, such development influences our cultural aspects negatively. There is no denying the fact that this trend may even force a culture to disappear permanently. In conclusion, since the easy accessibility of the same goods all over the world has crippling impacts on the atmosphere and the local culture, it is certainly an adverse development. Therefore, it is highly recommended to use locally produced goods and food items as much as possible.
Nowadays, due to the availability of similar
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goods
all over the world, most nations are looking alike. In my opinion, it is an adverse
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development
as it leads to a rise in carbon emission and the destruction of various cultures.

The most
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important
reason why I believe the availability of the same products everywhere is a
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negative
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development
is the increase in export.
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Countries
all over the world are selling surplus
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goods
to other
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countries
these days.
As a result
of this, there is a tremendous increase in the carbon footprint.
For example
, flights are the most appropriate and fastest mode for transporting a product to a foreign
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country
.
Therefore
, there is no doubt that an exotic Kiwi fruit exported from Australia to India
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leaves
a huge amount of harmful gases in the environment.

Another reason to disapprove of this trend is the loss of cultural diversity. In recent times, it is quite possible to transport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clothes
from one
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country
to another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
at a nominal cost. Due to this trend, the popularity of traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clothes
is decreasing. Traditional
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clothes
are linked
to the culture of a
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country
. With easy access to exported
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clothes
,
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people
are avoiding conventional clothing of their home
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countries
.
Consequently
, such
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development
influences our cultural aspects
negatively
. There is no denying the fact that this trend may even force a culture to disappear
permanently
.

In conclusion
, since the easy accessibility of the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
all over the world has crippling impacts on the atmosphere and the local culture, it is
certainly
an adverse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
.
Therefore
, it is
highly
recommended to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
locally
produced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
and food items as much as possible.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that the teenage years are the happiness times of most people 's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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