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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree and give your opinion v. 1
Although, it's believed by some people that having an idea that stands out in the market is the way to succeed in the marketplace. However, in my opinion, there are various factors that contribute in making a business profitable. This essay will discuss how factors like teamwork, planning and government policies play a vital role in the growth of companies. Firstly, having a different product does have its advantages over others. It gives the business a first mover advantage in that field which is still untapped by the rest of the entrepreneurs. For example, Tesla was one of the pioneers when it entered the commercial production of electric cars. In addition, to this other person cannot replicate the product easily as the technological know-how is still not available. Due to this, an idea that is new to the market provides an edge over the competition. Secondly, there are several factors that are more important that helps a trade to flourish. Particularly, having a hard working and efficient team is very crucial for a company. For instance, a good team can make an average idea work wonder's however the vice-versa is not true. Moreover, planning and supportive government policies can be a defining factor for an enterprise. As a result, other factors play an equally critical role in comparison with a unique product. To conclude, there are multiple factors that influence any corporate growth which need's to be given equal weightage. Any trade cannot grow with only being dependent on a single factor. There are several parameters like government start up rules, quality of the team and business planning that helps in the expansion and profitability of an enterprise.
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, it's believed by
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some
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people
that having an
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idea
that stands out in the market is the way to succeed in the marketplace.
However
, in my opinion, there are various
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factors
that contribute in making a business profitable. This essay will discuss how
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factors
like teamwork, planning and
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government
policies play a vital role in the growth of
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companies
.

Firstly
, having a
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different
product does have its advantages over others. It gives the business a
first
mover advantage in that field which is
still
untapped by the rest of the entrepreneurs.
For example
, Tesla was one of the pioneers when it entered the commercial production of electric cars.
In addition
, to this other person cannot replicate the product
easily
as the technological know-how is
still
not available. Due to this, an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that is
new to the market provides an edge over the competition.

Secondly
, there are several
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factors
that are more
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important
that
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helps
a trade to flourish.
Particularly
, having a
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hard working
and efficient team is
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very
crucial for a
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company
.
For instance
, a
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good
team can
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make
an average
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idea
work
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wonder's
however
the vice-versa is not true.
Moreover
, planning and supportive
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government
policies can be a defining
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factor
for an enterprise.
As a result
, other
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factors
play an
equally
critical role
in comparison
with a unique product.

To conclude
, there are multiple
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
factors
that influence any corporate growth which need's to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
equal weightage. Any trade cannot grow with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
being dependent on a single
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factor
. There are several parameters like
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
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start
up
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
, quality of the team and business planning that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in the expansion and profitability of an enterprise.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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