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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

In Today scenario, the money plays a vital role for each individuals to support others in the carey society which is believed by few peoples. I strongly agree with the above statement and essay will discuss important notions in the upcoming paragraph. Living a prosperous life can create more useful opportunities to take care poor civilians. Firstly, it is beneficial for students to pay their education fee who not affordable for them. In Addition to, local charity helps to distribute both dress and book materials for the students. They covers all the expenses includes medical insurance, accomadation since completing it. For Example, most of the Canada residents tries to take care them with separate household. On the other hand, the rich peoples can do any type of business and it makes them to create employment opportunity for the ones who need of it. In other words, being employed can change lifestyle as well as encourage them to further. For instance, take construction of industry it creates space for people to work in the field and get wages for the completion. In conclusion, the rich people has the best chance of being able to help others which will give sense of fulfillment to them and makes others to live happier.
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scenario, the money plays a vital role for each
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individuals
to support others in the
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carey
society which
is believed
by few
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peoples
. I
strongly
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agree
with the above statement and essay will discuss
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important
notions in the upcoming paragraph. Living a prosperous life can create more useful opportunities to take care poor civilians.
Firstly
, it is beneficial for students to pay their education fee who not affordable for them.
In Addition
to, local charity
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helps
to distribute both dress and book materials for the students. They
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covers
all the expenses includes medical insurance,
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accomadation
since completing it.
For Example
, most of the Canada residents tries to take care them with separate household. On the
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other
hand, the rich
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peoples
can do any type of business and it
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makes
them to create employment opportunity for the ones who need of it. In
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other
words,
being employed
can
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change
lifestyle
as well
as encourage them to
further
.
For instance
, take construction of industry it creates space for
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people
to work in the field and
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get
wages for the completion.
In conclusion
, the rich
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people
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has
the best chance of being able to
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help
others which will give sense of fulfillment to them and
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makes
others to
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live
happier.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
209 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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