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Some people think that the main factors influencing a child's development these days are things such as television, friends and music. Other believe that the family still remains more important v.3

Some people think that the main factors influencing a child's development these days are things such as television, friends and music. Other believe that the family still remains more important v. 3
Our industry and producing have affected the environment to a great degree. Governments in different countries need to help the environment. However, some people think it is our own responsibility to look after the environment. I am positively to this idea. Above all, the earth belongs to all species in the world. It is not some single person or organization’s responsibility to take care of it. Every one of us needs to start protecting the environment because we are obliged to do that. Whereas, the government is weaker compared with us. It can never cover everything if the public does not move. Second, it is easier for us than the authority to protect the local environment. Under the instruction of the government, we can easily help the local environment. According to some researches, people who do not drive cars will reduce the omit by a large amount. Some people in America also proposed lots of very good ideas to reduce the pollution and help the climate. For example, using clean fuels such as hygiene, electricity, rather than coals, bio-fuels, and so on. Besides, someone thinks it is eco-friendly to go to work by bicycle. I think all of the solutions are practical only if every one of us start it. There is no such an authority in the world that can give a direct order that people have to protect the world, but the public need to realize the significance and help it. In conclusion, people should take care of their local environment by themselves and the government should teach and instruct them to do.
Our industry and producing have
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affected
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environment
to a great degree.
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Governments
in
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different
countries need to
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help
the
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environment
.
However
,
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some
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people
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think
it is our
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own
responsibility to look after the
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environment
. I am
positively
to this
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idea
.

Above all
, the earth belongs to all species in the world. It is not
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some
single person or organization’s responsibility to take care of it. Every one of us needs to
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start
protecting the
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environment
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because
we
are obliged
to do that.
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Whereas
, the
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government
is weaker compared with us. It can never cover everything if the public does not
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move
.

Second, it is easier for us than the authority to protect the local
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environment
. Under the instruction of the
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government
, we can
easily
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help
the local
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environment
. According to
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some
researches,
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people
who do not drive cars will
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reduce
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by a large amount.
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people
in America
also
proposed lots of
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very
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good
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ideas
to
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reduce
the pollution and
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help
the climate.
For example
, using clean fuels such as hygiene, electricity,
rather
than coals, bio-fuels, and
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so
on.
Besides
, someone
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thinks
it is eco-friendly to go to work by bicycle. I
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think
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all of the
solutions are practical
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only
if every one of us
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start
it. There is no such an authority in the world that can give a direct order that
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people
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have to
protect the world,
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but
the public need to realize the significance and
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help
it.

In conclusion
,
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people
should take care of their local
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environment
by themselves and the
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government
should teach and instruct them to do.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the main factors influencing a child's development these days are things such as television, friends and music. Other believe that the family still remains more important v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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