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some people think that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools

some people think that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools 957k3

Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight people cause for the health care system, some people think that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools. I completely agree that this is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public health in relation to weight. Firstly, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long-term approach and introducing more sport and exercise in school. This method will ensure the next generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the west does sport possibly twice a week, which is not enough to counteract their otherwise sedentary lifestyle.

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 that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools. I completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
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 that this is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public health in relation to weight.

Firstly
, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long-term approach and introducing more sport and exercise in school.

This method will ensure the next
 generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the west does sport possibly
 twice a week, which is not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 to counteract their otherwise
 sedentary lifestyle. 