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Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us.

Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. Wmok0
Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. New inventions make our life easier. On the other hand, the doctor is also really necessary. Doctors are the person who helps us to get well when we are sick. They save our life. In my opinion, inventors and doctors can not be compared because they both play various roles in our lives. Lots of inventions have become an extremely extensive part of our lives. For example, airplanes by which we can travel and reach to other countries earlier than transport. Computers are the most amazing invention. We are totally now become dependent on computers, it has lots of benefits and is useful in numerous ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools, and homes, people use computers to save lots of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments. Furthermore, smartphones are also one of the greatest inventions for peoples. People found it more convenient for them in carrying as well as lots of applications are available due to which they can contact with their family, relatives, and friends. Moreover, there are lots of things invented by inventors that had made housework also easy for example, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators, etc. On the other hand, doctors are the most knowledgeable persons that can treat various diseases. Doctors study a lot and always want to get rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no doctors then nobody can protect sick people and the mortality rate increases extremely. There are lots of medicine also done to protect our life. Doctors perform various screenings and diagnose the disease properly. In conclusion, both inventors and doctors play various roles and values in our lives, without doctor’s human beings cannot survive healthily, or we can say that no one can be there to protect from illnesses. Obviously, without inventors, new inventions cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery people would be able to see.
Nowadays, we can
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science everywhere around us. New inventions
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make
our life easier.
On the other hand
, the
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doctor
is
also
really
necessary.
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Doctors
are the person who
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helps
us to
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get
well when we are sick. They save our life. In my opinion,
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inventors
and
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doctors
can not
be compared
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because
they both play
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various
roles in our
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lives
.

Lots of inventions have become an
extremely
extensive part of our
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lives
.
For example
, airplanes by which we can travel and reach to other countries earlier than transport. Computers are the most amazing invention. We are
totally
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now
become dependent on computers, it has
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lots
of benefits and is useful in numerous ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools, and homes,
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people
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use
computers to save
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lots
of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments.

Furthermore
, smartphones are
also
one of the greatest inventions for
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peoples
.
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People
found it more convenient for them in carrying
as well
as
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lots
of applications are available due to which they can contact with their family, relatives, and friends.
Moreover
, there are
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lots
of things invented by
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inventors
that had made housework
also
easy
for example
, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators, etc.

On the other hand
,
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doctors
are the most knowledgeable persons that can treat
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various
diseases.
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Doctors
study a
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lot
and always want to
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get
rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no
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doctors
then nobody can protect sick
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people
and the mortality rate increases
extremely
. There are
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lots
of medicine
also
done to protect our life.
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Doctors
perform
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various
screenings and diagnose the disease
properly
.

In conclusion
, both
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inventors
and
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doctors
play
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various
roles and values in our
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lives
, without
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doctor’s
human beings cannot survive
healthily
, or we can say that no one can be there to protect from illnesses.
Obviously
, without
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inventors
, new inventions cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery
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people
would be able to
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see
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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