Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that the internet has brought people together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is thought by some that technology has shrunk the world and made it easier to establish relationships, others counter that it has in fact led many people to disengage. From my point of view, although, communication via social networking sites had simplified our lives, segregation could be caused by technology. Probably the best argument in favour of the internet bringing people closer is the fact, it is a global phenomenon. Due to the massive popularity of the internet, most people have proclivity to ignore face-to-face communication. Furthermore, proponents of this idea claim that, the era of computers today has brought mankind means to easily send messages to people all over the world. In order to the emergence of social networking sites, such as, WhatsApp, Facebook, it has given to rise to the fastest and easiest means to send messages. A distant person can now able to call, message, and video call his loved ones anytime and anywhere as long as there is network connection. 188 Those who support the idea that technology had driven people further apart from one another, would emphasize the "balkanization" phenomenon. By this, we mean that, as the society is driven far apart, people tend to establish their own world in the unrealistic circumstances. Many become addicted to their gadgets, such as phones and laptops, where they either engage in a chat or online games, thus, ignoring their immediate environment and those around them. In my opinion, while the net has brought individuals close, we are busy online spending time with people unknown to us, without considering those within our reach. As a consequence, there is a reduced social interaction and activity, which in turn, leads to lack of understanding, segregation and loneliness. In conclusion, whereas the net has bridged the gap between individuals, in my opinion it has put the community in isolation due to less face-to-face communication.
It is
thought
by
some
that technology has shrunk the world and made it easier to establish relationships, others counter that it has in fact led
many
people
to disengage. From my point of view, although, communication via social networking sites had simplified our
lives
, segregation could
be caused
by technology.
Probably
the best argument in
favour
of the internet bringing
people
closer is the fact, it is a global phenomenon. Due to the massive popularity of the internet, most
people
have proclivity to
ignore
face-to-face communication.
Furthermore
, proponents of this
idea
claim that, the era of computers
today
has brought mankind means to
easily
send
messages to
people
all over the world. In order to the emergence of social networking sites, such as, WhatsApp, Facebook, it has
given
to rise to the fastest and easiest means to
send
messages. A distant person can
now
able to call, message, and video call his
loved
ones anytime and anywhere as long as there is network connection. 188 Those who support the
idea
that technology had driven
people
further
apart from one another, would emphasize the
"
balkanization
"
phenomenon. By this, we mean that, as the society
is driven
far apart,
people
tend to establish their
own
world in the unrealistic circumstances.
Many
become addicted to their gadgets, such as phones and laptops, where they either engage in a chat or online games,
thus
, ignoring their immediate environment and those around them. In my opinion, while the net has brought individuals close, we are busy online spending time with
people
unknown to us, without considering those within our reach. As a consequence, there is a
reduced
social interaction and activity, which in turn, leads to lack of understanding, segregation and loneliness.
In conclusion
, whereas the net has bridged the gap between individuals, in my opinion it has put the community in isolation due to less face-to-face communication.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that the internet has brought people together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
314 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts