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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university syudies

In many countries the graduator of hight school are encouraged to work or travel before starting to study at university. In my essay I aim at presenting good and bad points of this issue with clear examples relying on my knowledge. On one hand, usually people face up to some financial difficulties after ending high school and it is suggested to work or travel until the starting university. I think it has several advantages worth mentioning such as earning enough money to recover financially and also they can broaden their worldview by this way. That's to say, it is highly useful action for students if they want to start studying university studies with no problems. On the other hand, there is a big prevention against the finisher of high school which can lead to fail an exam of university. It is problems related to the memory. A long period of travel or trip makes people forget some information which they learnt at school. If a person prepare for some years to university examinations at school, he or she may be disturbed by a travel or work before starting university studies Coming to conclusion, I can say with no hesitation that traveling or working for a year before studying at university has so many good aspects as well as drawbacks similarly
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university
. In my essay I aim at presenting
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points of this issue with
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examples relying on my knowledge.

On one hand,
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people
face up to
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some
financial difficulties after ending high
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school
and it
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until the starting
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university
. I
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think
it has several advantages worth mentioning such as earning
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enough
money to recover
financially
and
also
they can broaden their worldview by this way. That's to say, it is
highly
useful action for students if they want to
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start
studying
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university
studies with no problems.

On the other hand
, there is a
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prevention against the finisher of high
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school
which can lead to fail an exam of
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. It is problems related to the memory. A long period of
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travel
or trip
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years to
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examinations at
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school
, he or she may
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travel
or work
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before
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studies


Coming to conclusion, I can say with no hesitation that traveling or working for a year
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IELTS essay In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university syudies

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
219 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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