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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones nowadays has unwanted effects on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones nowadays has unwanted effects on young people’s reading and writing skills. v. 2
The rapid development of technology has offered people innovative devices such as Smartphones and Laptop computers, which made the lives of people easier. However, some claim that these advancements have negatively affected the literacy level of the young generation. I strongly agree with this argument. To begin with, youngsters spend a large portion of a day with their electronic devices. Previous generations did not have the luxury of mobile phones or computers. Hence, the most common entertainment they knew was books. Reading books improved their reading and writing skills. Unfortunately, today, people rarely have time to read newspapers or books. The downside of this is young people not getting the skills they needed to improve their literacy. Because they only use phones for social media and to watch videos, non of these help to increase the reading and writing talent of theirs. For instance, studies have proven that teenagers who spend an excessive amount of time with electronic devices tend to loose the oral communication skills as well. Additionally, numerous computer software developed for writing has encouraged youngsters to forget the language rules. All most all the computers today are consist of spell and grammar checkers. When people continuously use them, it is common to forget the spellings and the general writing rules of any particular language. Moreover, when using electronic communication methods such as short messages, young generation is using the short version of languages. The dangerous effect of this is some of those terms now identified as a part of the language. Therefore, due to smartphones and computers not only young, but everyone is loosing their writing touch. In conclusion, although electronic devices are easing the lifestyle of people today, the negative side of them is people loosing their reading and writing skills especially the young generation. The most common reason for this is spending more and more time with them and using various software designed for writing. Hence, I agree that these devices are causing certain damage to the literacy level of the adolescents.
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people
innovative
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devices
such as Smartphones and Laptop computers, which made the
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lives
of
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people
easier.
However
,
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some
claim that these advancements have
negatively
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affected
the literacy level of the
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young
generation. I
strongly
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agree
with this argument.

To
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begin
with, youngsters spend a large portion of a day with their
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electronic
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devices
. Previous generations did not have the luxury of mobile phones or computers.
Hence
, the most common entertainment they knew was books.
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Reading
books
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improved
their
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reading
and
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writing
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skills
. Unfortunately,
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today
,
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people
rarely have time to read newspapers or books. The downside of this is
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young
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people
not getting the
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skills
they needed to
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improve
their literacy.
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they
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only
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phones for social media and to
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watch
videos, non of these
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help
to increase the
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reading
and
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writing
talent of theirs.
For instance
, studies have proven that
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teenagers
who spend an excessive amount of time with
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electronic
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devices
tend to
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loose
the oral communication
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skills
as well
.

Additionally
, numerous computer software developed for
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writing
has encouraged youngsters to forget the
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language
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rules
.
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All most
all the computers
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today
are consist of spell and grammar checkers. When
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people
continuously
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use
them, it is common to forget the spellings and the general
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writing
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rules
of any particular
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language
.
Moreover
, when using
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electronic
communication methods such as short messages,
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young
generation is using the short version of
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languages
. The
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dangerous
effect of this is
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some
of those terms
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now
identified as a part of the
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language
.
Therefore
, due to smartphones and computers not
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only
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young
,
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everyone is loosing their
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writing
touch.

In conclusion
, although
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electronic
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devices
are easing the lifestyle of
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people
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today
, the
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negative
side of them is
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people
loosing their
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reading
and
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writing
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skills
especially
the
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young
generation. The most common reason for this is spending more and more time with them and using various software designed for
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writing
.
Hence
, I
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agree
that these
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devices
are causing certain damage to the literacy level of the adolescents.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones nowadays has unwanted effects on young people’s reading and writing skills. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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