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: Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

: Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. v. 2
The development of technology dragged on the large number of digital communication methods such as computers, mobile phones were produced. People often use those to connect with others. However, I believe that the growth use of digital communication has had a negative effect on ability to read and write of young people. The primary reason is starting at its convenience and speed. For example, people use the informal language in communication via computers and moblie phones. They will use “u” instead of “you”, “HPB” replaced to “happy birth day”. Besides, mobile operators have capped the length of text messages to 160 characters. On the contrary, writing skills’s requirement is making full sentences with formal language. Children will can not discribe a beatiful scenery or express their fellings on papers. Spending too much time on digital communication methods will affect on the lacking of ability to write. Another negative effect of the increasing of computers and mobile phones for communication were that capping the reading skills. Of phones and computers, there are automatic spell-check tools when you type a message. If this process are repeated, the user will be depend on it. Their spelling, grammar and lexical range may gradually erode. In addition, there are many vary information in the Internet which people use digital communication methods can read. They will not know how to select it to read. The disorder of information is one of disavantages caused by the increasing use of electronic devices. It also affect on our reading skills. To sum up, we can not negate advantages which electronic devices gave; however, people should have controlled the time spending on it. If not, the our ability to read and write will be seriously affected.
The development of technology dragged on the large number of digital
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communication
methods such as computers, mobile
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phones
were produced
.
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People
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often
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use
those to connect with others.
However
, I believe that the growth
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use
of digital
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communication
has had a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on ability to
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read
and write of young
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people
.

The primary reason is starting at its convenience and speed.
For example
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the informal language in
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communication
via computers and
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moblie
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phones
. They will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
“u”
instead
of “you”, “
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HPB
” replaced to “happy birth day”.
Besides
, mobile operators have capped the length of text messages to 160 characters.
On the contrary
, writing
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skills’s
requirement is making full sentences with formal language. Children
Two modal verbs connected. Did you mean: "will, can", "will" or "can"?
will can
not
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discribe
a
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beatiful
scenery or express their
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fellings on
papers. Spending too much time on digital
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communication
methods will
Did you mean "effect"?
affect
on the lacking of ability to write.

Another
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negative
effect of the increasing of computers and mobile
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phones
for
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communication
were that capping the reading
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skills
. Of
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phones
and computers, there are automatic spell-
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check
tools when you type a message. If this process
are repeated
, the user will be
Consider using the past participle "depended"?
depend
on it. Their spelling, grammar and lexical range may
gradually
erode.
In addition
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
vary information in the Internet which
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
digital
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communication
methods can
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read
. They will not know how to select it to
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read
. The disorder of information is one of
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disavantages
caused by the increasing
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use
of electronic devices. It
also
Did you mean "effect"?
affect
on our reading
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skills
.

To sum up, we can not negate advantages which electronic devices gave;
however
,
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people
should have controlled the time spending on it. If not,
A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "our ability" or "the ability"?
the our ability
to
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read
and write will be
seriously
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affected
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay : Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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