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. Some people think that the government should put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily. Do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable true that life is unimaginable without eating. In fact food is omnipresent. Some people believe that authority should impose the tax on junk food for encouraging people to eat good food however; I differ from them and opine that put a tax is not feasible solution Thus, I firmly disagree with the statement presented. I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs. The first and predominant reason for supporting the concept of encouraging people to eat more nutritional food is that the government should arrange the campaign about importance of nutritional value of food. In other words government should reduce the price of healthy meal so more people start eating healthy meal. Another factor which should be considered is that government should dissemination awareness programme on TV channels and social media about demerits of having canned food to our health. To begin with, one more convincing point is that eating healthy food has plentiful benefits such as improve gut health, making strong bones and teeth, prevent complication of diabetes and so on. Although I concede that street food is more delicious and quick food however nourishing food has more nutritious such as vitamins, proteins, amino acid and many more. Furthermore, government should allocate provision of policy related to healthy eating practices which promotes to the people. All in all, not only imposing tax on fast food is feasible solution to incite people but also broadcasting programme about value of wholesome food which is promote to the people to eat nourishing food.
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eating
. In fact
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food
is omnipresent.
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Some
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people
believe that authority should impose the tax on junk
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food
for encouraging
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people
to eat
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good
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food
however
; I differ from them and opine that put a tax is not feasible solution
Thus
, I
firmly
disagree with the statement presented. I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs.

The
first
and predominant reason for supporting the concept of encouraging
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people
to eat more nutritional
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food
is that the
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government
should arrange the campaign about importance of nutritional value of
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food
.
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government
should
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reduce
the price of
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healthy
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meal
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more
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people
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start
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eating
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healthy
meal. Another factor which should
be considered
is that
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government
should dissemination awareness
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programme
on TV channels and social media about demerits of having canned
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food
to our health.

To
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begin
with, one more convincing point is that
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eating
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healthy
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food
has plentiful benefits such as
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improve
gut health, making strong bones and teeth,
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prevent
complication of diabetes and
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so
on. Although I concede that street
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food
is more delicious and quick
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food
however
nourishing
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food
has more nutritious such as vitamins, proteins, amino acid and
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many
more.
Furthermore
,
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government
should allocate provision of policy related to
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healthy
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eating
practices which promotes to the
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people
.

All in all, not
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only
imposing tax on
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fast
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food
is feasible solution to incite
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people
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but
also
broadcasting
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programme
about value of wholesome
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which is
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promote
to the
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people
to eat nourishing
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IELTS essay . Some people think that the government should put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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