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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

In the past few decades, one of the most serious issues faced by modern society is the imbalance of the world’s ecosystem. Not only do human activities hurt biodiversity, but it also causes massive destruction of different species. In this essay, I will examine two factors that are driving the loss of biodiversity and suggest ways to improve this situation. The extinction of species is mainly caused by two things. The first is mainly the overexploitation of natural resources caused by repeated human activities over a long period. For instance, frequent fishing in the same area does not give enough time for the fishes to breed, resulting in the loss of some of those creatures. The other related factor is changing their natural habitats to fulfill the needs of the growing human population. If species cannot cope with these changes, they would extinct. In other words, human activities often deplete the local flora and fauna, resulting in loss of biodiversity. There are, however, some options to alleviate the problems caused by an alarming loss of biodiversity. One is to protect the natural habitat and provide a favorable environment to save some of the endangered species as well as to prevent the death of the others. Another solution would be to promote awareness among people about the dangers of the loss of biodiversity. Therefore, they will be conscious to maintain the ecosystem balance. Is it not our social responsibility to protect the world we live in? In conclusion, even though the rapid loss of biodiversity seems to be an inevitable part of modern life, it ought to be stopped. By protecting the natural resources and making people aware of the consequences, the situation could be improved.
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do
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activities hurt biodiversity,
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different
species. In this essay, I will examine two factors that are driving the
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loss
of biodiversity and suggest ways to
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improve
this situation.

The extinction of species is
mainly
caused by two things. The
first
is
mainly
the overexploitation of
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natural
resources caused by repeated
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human
activities over a long period.
For instance
, frequent fishing in the same area does not give
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enough
time for the fishes to breed, resulting in the
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loss
of
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some
of those creatures. The other related factor is changing their
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natural
habitats to fulfill the needs of the growing
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human
population. If species cannot cope with these
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changes
, they would extinct.
In other words
,
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human
activities
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often
deplete the local flora and fauna, resulting in
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loss
of biodiversity.

There are,
however
,
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some
options to alleviate the problems caused by an alarming
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loss
of biodiversity. One is to protect the
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natural
habitat and provide a favorable environment to save
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some of the
endangered species
as well
as to
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prevent
the death of the others. Another solution would be to promote awareness among
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people
about the
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dangers
of the
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loss
of biodiversity.
Therefore
, they will be conscious to maintain the ecosystem balance. Is it not our social responsibility to protect the world we
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live
in?

In conclusion
,
even though
the rapid
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loss
of biodiversity seems to be an inevitable part of modern life, it ought to be
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stopped
. By protecting the
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natural
resources and making
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people
aware of the consequences, the situation could be
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improved
.
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IELTS essay Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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