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In this concurrent era, eating fast food is ubiquitous globally.

In this concurrent era, eating fast food is ubiquitous globally. It is therefore suggested that enforcing tax on junk food is not feasible solution to eat good food but I feel the other way as to arrange campaign about importance of healthier diet and reduce the price of good food. Firstly, imposing tax on canned food which is not only solution to encourage the people but instead of enforcing tax, authorities should organize the program about value of nutrition for people's health due to that people can understand the importance of healthy diet, and they also vigilant to take unhealthy food in their routine. Additionally, government should telecast some advertisement about sever diseases which occur by having too much fast food as a result people would more attentive to have quick food. For instance, a recent survey by an international health organization depicts the 75% of people afflicting by fatal diseases like cholesterol problem, blood pressure, diabetes and many more. Moreover, Government should diminish the rate of nutritional food due to that everyone can afford good food. Although many may argue that quick food is more tasty and easily available everywhere and any time, however, I feel, it may have less nutrition like protein, vitamin, amino acid and many more. Furthermore, if authorities put high rate of tax on junk food, it may trouble for working people or students those who have no time for preparing food at home because such people may not afford that much amount of money to purchase ready-made food. In conclusion, arranging campaign and advertising are playing vital role for awareness about to take wholesome food. Therefore, I fully disagree that putting tax on processed food is not solution to inspire to take nourishing food.
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fast
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is ubiquitous globally. It is
therefore
suggested that enforcing
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tax
on junk
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food
is not feasible solution to eat
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good
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food
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but
I feel the other way as to arrange campaign about importance of healthier diet and
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reduce
the price of
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good
food.

Firstly
, imposing
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tax
on canned
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food
which is not
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only
solution to encourage the
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people
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but
instead
of enforcing
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tax
, authorities should organize the program about value of nutrition for
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people
's health due to that
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people
can understand the importance of healthy diet, and they
also
vigilant to take unhealthy
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food
in their routine.
Additionally
,
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government
should telecast
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some
advertisement about sever diseases which occur by having too much
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fast
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food
as a result
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people
would more attentive to have quick
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food
.
For instance
, a recent survey by an international health organization depicts the 75% of
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people
afflicting by fatal diseases like cholesterol problem, blood pressure, diabetes and
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many
more.

Moreover
,
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Government
should diminish the rate of nutritional
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food
due to that everyone can afford
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good
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food
. Although
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many
may argue that quick
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food
is more tasty and
easily
available everywhere and any time,
however
, I feel, it may have less nutrition like protein, vitamin, amino acid and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more.
Furthermore
, if authorities put high rate of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
on junk
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food
, it may trouble for working
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people
or students those who have no time for preparing
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food
at home
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because
such
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people
may not afford that much amount of money to
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purchase
ready-made food.

In conclusion
, arranging campaign and advertising are playing vital role for awareness about to take wholesome
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food
.
Therefore
, I
fully
disagree that putting
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tax
on processed
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food
is not solution to inspire to take nourishing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
.
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IELTS essay In this concurrent era, eating fast food is ubiquitous globally.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
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