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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. v. 1

Government spending have been criticized throughout the world on the basis of preferences. These people claim that government wastes money in the field of arts which could be preferably spent on other important areas. This essay will argue why I entirely disagree with this view point despite benefits related to spending on other areas. Many people think that art sector should not be look after by government and budget designated for it is not justified. They think that this money should be spend in different areas such as on education and infrastructure. Education, no doubt is very necessary for every single person as it changes the perspective of person, in addition to that it also improve country’s literacy rate. People also opine that infrastructure of country should be strong and advanced which is also a valid point as good roads promotes tourism. Electricity is a major requirement in this era and many rural people are not being blessed with this facility. For instance, report infers that 40 percent of population in Africa lives without electricity supply. These issues bolstered people that money specified for arts should be spend on the different areas as mentioned to lessen the problems faced by different people irrespective of from where they belong. People, including me and especially artists, have been excessively concerned about government’s spending on arts. This view point is justified as it leads to promotion of culture and artists throughout the world. Many handmade cloths and handicrafts made by small artists which is identity of any region is immensely liked and purchased by tourists from different areas of world. For example, Sindhi culture is described through a shawl known as Ajrak which is very popular. Country’s spending on artists promote their talent and therefore boost the economy as well. If money designated for arts is spent on areas such as education and infrastructure than results will be grave as it will not only be in favourable of economy but also artists will be demoralized, jobless and living would be compromised. Overall, the idea of relocating arts budget is ill-informed, moreover, problems will not only be unsolved but will also have worse outcomes In conclusion, this essay argues that people who favoured spending of money on arts in unreasonable have flawed understanding and underestimate the effects of what they believe. In my opinion, these problems cannot be solved by shifting the budget and making arts sector deprived, as it can be tackled by awareness, team work effort by NGOS and increasing the budget, not by relocating, for education and infrastructure.

IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Government
spending have
been criticized
throughout the
world
on the basis of preferences. These
people
claim that
government
wastes money in the field of arts which could be
preferably
spent on other
important
areas. This essay will argue why I
entirely
disagree with this view point despite benefits related to spending on other areas.
Many
people
think
that art sector
should
not be look after by
government
and budget designated for it is not justified. They
think
that this money
should
be
spend
in
different
areas such as on
education
and infrastructure.
Education
, no doubt is
very
necessary for every single person as it
changes
the perspective of person,
in addition
to that it
also
improve
country’s literacy rate.
People
also
opine that infrastructure of country
should
be strong and advanced which is
also
a valid point as
good
roads promotes tourism. Electricity is a major requirement in this era and
many
rural
people
are not
being blessed
with this facility.
For instance
, report infers that 40 percent of population in Africa
lives
without electricity supply. These issues bolstered
people
that money specified for arts
should
be
spend
on the
different
areas as mentioned to lessen the problems faced by
different
people
irrespective of from where they belong.
People
, including me and
especially
artists, have been
excessively
concerned about
government
’s spending on arts. This view point
is justified
as it leads to promotion of culture and artists throughout the
world
.
Many
handmade cloths and handicrafts made by
small
artists which is identity of any region is
immensely
liked and
purchased
by tourists from
different
areas of
world
.
For example
, Sindhi culture is
described
through a shawl known as
Ajrak
which is
very
popular. Country’s spending on artists promote their talent and
therefore
boost the economy
as well
. If money designated for arts
is spent
on areas such as
education
and infrastructure than results will be grave as it will not
only
be in
favourable
of economy
but
also
artists will
be demoralized
, jobless and living would
be compromised
.
Overall
, the
idea
of relocating arts budget is ill-informed,
moreover
, problems will not
only
be unsolved
but
will
also
have worse outcomes
In conclusion
, this essay argues that
people
who
favoured
spending of money on arts in unreasonable have flawed understanding and underestimate the effects of what they believe. In my opinion, these problems cannot
be solved
by shifting the budget and making arts sector deprived, as it can
be tackled
by awareness, team work effort by
NGOS
and increasing the budget, not by relocating, for
education
and infrastructure.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
3 paragraphs
427 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resources: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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