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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. What extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. What extend pRLAy
It is considered by a few individuals authority spend a lot of money on museums and entertainment sources as compared to other infra6 and they zay that invest money in other things which are beneficial for nation. I am fully accord with given notion. This essay will discuss some reasons and provide logical conclusion in the end. A few members believe that the government investing money on artz. According to them, if municiple improve the transport services in rural areas. In other words, in present days many countrysides does not have transporting facilities or very poor, with these residents face numerous issues in critical situations. Another reason is that lack of health and literacy rate, if administration sectors investment on health centres and educational sectors, provide that services in low price so poor people give benefit and make good health and get success in future with higher qualification. Besides the above consideration, why it is important to spend money on arts. The first reason is growth of economy, if government repair and save historical things likewise ancient buildings, antiques and other old used war weapons, it is main attraction of tourism, if tourist visit to art places from different kingdom it also affect to economy growth. The second reason is create more opportunities and prevent history for next generation. Therefore, if municiple spend money on that things and it also create more opportunities for employment due to need of more workers. For instance, government hire technician, security guards and other employers for art sector. In conclusion, I reiterate that both points are crucial for present and next generation. Such as if people are more literate, they do work hard for success and improvement in infrastructure helpfull for rural areas. Another reason is better health and reduce unemployment, give more chances to higher qualified
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authority spend
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money
on museums and entertainment sources as compared to
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infra6 and
they
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zay
that invest
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money
in
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other
things which are beneficial for nation. I am
fully
accord with
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given
notion. This essay will discuss
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some
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reasons
and provide logical conclusion in the
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end
.

A few members believe that the
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government
investing
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money
on
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artz
. According to them, if
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municiple
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improve
the transport services in rural areas. In
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other
words, in present days
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many
countrysides does not have transporting facilities or
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very
poor, with these residents face numerous issues in critical situations. Another
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reason
is that lack of
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health
and literacy rate, if administration sectors investment on
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health
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centres
and educational sectors, provide that services in low price
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so
poor
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people
give benefit and
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make
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good
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health
and
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get
success in future with higher qualification.

Besides
the above consideration, why it is
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important
to spend
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money
on arts. The
first
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reason
is growth of economy, if
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government
repair and save historical things
likewise
ancient buildings, antiques and
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other
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old
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used
war weapons, it is main attraction of tourism, if tourist visit to art places from
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different
kingdom it
also
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affect
to economy growth. The second
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reason
is
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create
more opportunities and
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history for
next
generation.
Therefore
, if
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municiple
spend
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money
on that things and it
also
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create
more opportunities for employment due to need of more workers.
For instance
,
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government
hire technician, security guards and
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other
employers for art sector.

In conclusion
, I reiterate that both points are crucial for present and
next
generation. Such as if
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people
are more literate, they do work
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hard
for success and improvement in infrastructure
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helpfull
for rural areas. Another
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reason
is better
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health
and
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reduce
unemployment, give more chances to higher
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qualified
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. What extend

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