Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy the job. Do you agree or disagree?

It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy the job. qV5AX
In recent years, the unemployment rate is increasing. One of the most important reasons is that they are not inspired to work. Hence, many people argue that it is better to be unemployed than to work without satisfaction. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this statement. Firstly, much evidence suggests that job performance depends on human emotions. Consider Nhan Dan magazine, working efficiency is only 40% if people do in an undesirable environment. Secondly, most people give up their works because they are not satisfied, inspired, or motivated. Therefore, people easily get mental diseases such as depression or stress. For example, many Vietnamese students often choose information technology as a career without being interested in this field because they think that this job is trending and well paid. When becoming an information technology engineer, they have to usually look at computer screens, use programming languages or design software. This makes them exhausted due to the long working hours of the day. Additionally, many people think that working from home is also unemployment. It is not true because people who work from home still can make products and revenue. For example, nowadays people tend to be handmakers, vloggers, bloggers, or online businessmen. They not only generate income but also become the influencers for others who have not found a suitable work and a comfortable environment. Besides, many people give up their boring jobs to stay at home to gain knowledge and experience for the jobs they want. In conclusion, I totally believe that people should be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy the job.
In recent years, the unemployment rate is increasing. One of the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
reasons is that they are not inspired to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
Hence
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
argue that it is better to
be unemployed
than to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
without satisfaction. In my opinion, I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, much evidence suggests that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
performance depends on human emotions. Consider
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nhan
Dan magazine, working efficiency is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
40% if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do in an undesirable environment.
Secondly
, most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
give up their works
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are not satisfied, inspired, or motivated.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
mental diseases such as depression or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
Vietnamese students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
choose information technology as a career without
being interested
in this field
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
is trending and well paid. When becoming an information technology engineer, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
usually
look at computer screens,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
programming languages or design software. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them exhausted due to the long working hours of the day.

Additionally
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that working from home is
also
unemployment. It is not true
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home
still
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
products and revenue.
For example
, nowadays
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
tend to be
Possible spelling mistake found.
handmakers
, vloggers, bloggers, or online businessmen. They not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
generate income
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
become the influencers for others who have not found a suitable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and a comfortable environment.
Besides
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
give up their boring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
to stay at home to gain knowledge and experience for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
they want.

In conclusion
, I
totally
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should be
Use "(unemployed)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
unemployed
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
be employed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they do not enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy the job.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts