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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view. write at least 250 words. v.18

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. v. 18
Few individuals contemplate that the government is extravagant spending on the art, instead that money can be further implemented in other areas of development. I strongly agree with this point of view. Firstly, considering the developing countries the ruling authority must concentrate on economical development looking into emerging market platforms rather than spending on movies, music, theatres etc. For this I believe the government should initiate some measurements such as, vast education facilities, libraries, electronic equipments and most importantly job opportunities. For example, India is a developing country and number of unemployment is high in India because of lack of job opportunities. In media, we can see Indian government is busy spending on building huge statues and movies to get fame but there are more than 10, 000 youngsters who are highly qualified but no jobs for them. However, art should be encouraged because a good artist can elevate the culture of their country and also express his/her ideas through art. For instance, in India during period of freedom fighter Mr. Narshima Reddy, his lover was an artist and she uses to express the idea of revolution through her dance which provoked the people to fight for their freedom and the British people were astonished to know this culture. To conclude, art can be used as a medium of entertainment, but without considering the economical balance spending more on art is not valuable. I firmly believe that the government should consider raising funds looking into different aspects of the development of a country.
Few individuals contemplate that the
government
is extravagant
spending
on the
art
,
instead
that money can be
further
implemented in other areas of development. I
strongly
agree
with this point of view.

Firstly
, considering the developing
countries
the ruling authority
must
concentrate on
economical
development looking into emerging market platforms
rather
than
spending
on movies, music,
theatres
etc. For this I believe the
government
should initiate
some
measurements such as, vast education facilities, libraries, electronic equipments and most
importantly
job opportunities.
For example
, India is a developing
country
and number of unemployment is high in India
because
of lack of job opportunities. In media, we can
see
Indian
government
is busy
spending
on building huge
statues
and movies to
get
fame
but
there are more than 10, 000 youngsters who are
highly
qualified
but
no jobs for them.

However
,
art
should
be encouraged
because
a
good
artist can elevate the culture of their
country
and
also
express his/her
ideas
through
art
.
For instance
, in India during period of freedom fighter Mr.
Narshima
Reddy, his lover was an
artist and
she
uses
to express the
idea
of revolution through her dance which provoked the
people
to fight for their freedom and the British
people
were astonished
to know this culture.

To conclude
,
art
can be
used
as a medium of entertainment,
but
without considering the economical balance
spending
more on
art
is not valuable. I
firmly
believe that the
government
should consider raising funds looking into
different
aspects of the development of a
country
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
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