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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business? v.7

Family business are quite popular in many countries. While some believe that they have a higher chance of being successful in their business by sharing it with their kinsmen, however, some other argue that this method will lead to some obstacles for upcoming generation. In my perspective joint venture has more merits than demerits which will be ascribed in subsequent paragraphs. To embark on, the integrity and profound loyalty are the most prominent benefits of sharing a business with relatives. The family members will always stand with their business partner in any stage of life, whether ups or down come in the business. They will ever attempt to find the ways how to elaborate their business. In addition to this, kinsmen never blame their parents for any kind of loss or profit as they both may responsible for it. To corroborate, a well known brand, 'Nike' is ran by two kinsmen and they are successful in their business with joint efforts. Therefore, sharing business with kinsmen is more beneficial than sharing with third person. Despite having this, there are some drawbacks of having joint venture. First of all, family business might generate some obstacles the partners like profit sharing, position and many other. Personages will fight for their leadership in business and sometimes they will be divided into two businessmen. For instance, a joint venture between the Hero group and Honda motor company was established in 1984. Unfortunately, due to some descrimination, both partners separate their business in 2010. Hence, family business can produce misunderstanding as well as descrimination among the partners. To sum up, although there are some disagreement and disadvantages of joint venture, it is more durable as well as beneficial for the family members and upcoming generation.
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countries. While
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believe that they have a higher chance of being successful in their
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by
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it with their kinsmen,
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argue that this method will lead to
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obstacles for upcoming generation. In my perspective
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joint
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venture
has more merits than demerits which will
be ascribed
in subsequent paragraphs.

To embark on, the integrity and profound loyalty are the most prominent benefits of
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sharing
a
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business
with relatives. The
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family
members will always stand with their
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business
partner in any stage of life, whether ups or down
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come
in the
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business
. They will ever attempt to find the ways how to elaborate their
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business
.
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to this, kinsmen never blame their parents for any kind of loss or profit as they both may responsible for it. To corroborate, a well known brand, 'Nike' is
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kinsmen and
they are successful in their
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with
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efforts.
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,
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sharing
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business
with kinsmen is more beneficial than
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sharing
with third person.

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drawbacks of having
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.
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,
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family
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might generate
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obstacles the partners like profit
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, position and
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other
. Personages will fight for their leadership in
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business and
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into two businessmen.
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, a
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between the Hero group and Honda motor
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company
was established
in 1984. Unfortunately, due to
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some
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descrimination
, both partners separate their
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business
in 2010.
Hence
,
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family
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business
can produce misunderstanding
as well
as
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descrimination
among the partners.

To sum up, although there are
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disagreement and disadvantages of
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joint
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venture
, it is more durable
as well
as beneficial for the
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family
members and upcoming generation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to run a business with is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
5.5
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