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Some people think that the best way to learn is from newspaper. Others think that the best way to learn is through media. v.2

Some people think that the best way to learn is from newspaper. Others think that the best way to learn is through media. v. 2
In this world everything changed, and technology took a big part from our lives, especially in learning. Learning or reading from book, newspaper for some people is still the best way, others think that the best way to learn is through media and stay up to date. Number of people prefer to learn from papers and believe that they can benefit from it more. First, studying from magazines or books is much easier for reader, to concentrate on what is the topic, he/she can highlight the points directly. Second, to learn from newspaper, encourages the person to read more and improve his language, by collecting new vocab, information and go deeply in details. For example, when I was at school, our English teacher used to bring us books, articles, to learn from, expand our knowledge and language. On the other hand, technology is overtaking publish, through internet or television, that’s why several societies think that media is the best way to learn from. First, using the internet has a wild range of information, that help humans to search and find any data they want quickly, without difficulties. Second, watching on TV or any video online, will assist the viewer to learn new things like, hand craft work, new languages, all these will make it easy and fast to study. For example, a psychology doctor released a DVD name” Children Can Read”, to help kids to talk their first word and learn new language. As a conclusion, there is two type of people, some prefer to learn from newspaper, others through media. From my side, I believe that both procedures will aid us to learn, improve our knowledge and discover new things.
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changed
, and technology took a
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big
part from our
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lives
,
especially
in learning. Learning or reading from book, newspaper for
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some
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people
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is
still
the best way, others
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think
that the best way to
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learn
is through media and stay up to date.

Number of
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people
prefer to
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learn
from papers and believe that they can benefit from it more.
First
, studying from magazines or books is much easier for reader, to concentrate on what is the topic, he/she can highlight the points
directly
. Second, to
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learn
from newspaper, encourages the person to read more and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
his language, by collecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
vocab, information and go
deeply
in
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details
.
For example
, when I was at school, our English teacher
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used
to bring us books, articles, to
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learn
from, expand our knowledge and language.

On the other hand
, technology is overtaking publish, through internet or television, that’s why several societies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that media is the best way to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from.
First
, using the internet has a wild range of information, that
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help
humans to search and find any data they want
quickly
, without difficulties. Second, watching on TV or any video online, will assist the viewer to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things like, hand craft work,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
languages, all these will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it easy and
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fast
to study.
For example
, a psychology doctor released a DVD name” Children Can Read”, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
kids to talk their
first
word and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
language.

As a conclusion, there is two type of
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people
,
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some
prefer to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from newspaper, others through media. From my side, I believe that both procedures will aid us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our knowledge and discover
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to learn is from newspaper. Others think that the best way to learn is through media. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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