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Many sports players advertise sports-related products. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.4

Many sports players advertise sports-related products. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 4
Today, advertising plays a crucial part in every business. Many sports stars and athletes advertise various sport related products. Although, it might result in better sales of the company, there are arguments that it can cause some problems. This essay examines both advantages and disadvantages of sports stars endorsing products. To begin with, a product endorsed by a famous sport person generates a lot of sales and employment opportunities. By watching their star in an advertisement, people may be influenced to buy that product. For example, Virat Kholi are famous cricketer has started endorsing MRF cricket bats, which instantly boosted the sales of the company by 30%. Furthermore, sport persons generally advertise the item by playing their sport or by showing their skills. This encourages the youth of today to have an active and athletic lifestyle similar to the person in the advertisement. The influence of advertisements with a famous personality in it, is significantly higher when compared to normal adverts. This leads to children, forcing their parents to buy them the desired product. For instance, a recent poll conducted by Time of India states that more than 45% of parents agreed to have spent 10% more money due to sports equipment for their children. In addition to this, companies pay very huge amount to the celebrity for marketing their goods. They plan to retrieve this amount by increasing the price of the product, therefore, further increasing the burden on parents to satisfy their loved one' s desire. In conclusion, there are various benefits for companies to which sport persons advertise for. However, there are greater disadvantages to parents because of their children, forcing them to buy rather costly items, which are endorsed by the their favourite celebrity.
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stars and athletes advertise various
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related
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products
. Although, it might result in better sales of the
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company
, there are arguments that it can cause
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problems. This essay examines both advantages and disadvantages of
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stars endorsing products.

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product
endorsed by a
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famous
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sport
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person
generates
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a lot of
sales and employment opportunities. By watching their star in an advertisement,
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endorsing MRF cricket bats, which
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boosted the sales of the
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company
by 30%.
Furthermore
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sport
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persons
generally
advertise the item by playing their
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or by showing their
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skills
. This encourages the youth of
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today
to have an active and athletic lifestyle similar to the
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person
in the advertisement.

The influence of advertisements with a
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famous
personality in it, is
significantly
higher when compared to normal adverts. This leads to children, forcing their
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parents
to
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buy
them the desired
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product
.
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, a recent poll conducted by Time of India states that more than 45% of
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parents
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agreed
to have spent 10% more money due to
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sports
equipment for their children.
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to this,
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companies
pay
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very
huge amount to the celebrity for marketing their
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goods
. They plan to retrieve this amount by increasing the price of the
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product
,
therefore
,
further
increasing the burden on
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parents
to satisfy their
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In conclusion
, there are various benefits for
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companies
to which
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sport
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persons
advertise for.
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, there are greater disadvantages to
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parents
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because
of their children, forcing them to
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buy
rather
costly items, which
are endorsed
by
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the their favourite
celebrity.
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IELTS essay Many sports players advertise sports-related products. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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