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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 6
Every year, the death toll in road crashes experiences a marked increase. Raising the legal age of adolescents is believed to be the best practice to guarantee road's safety. From my perspective, Although this safety measure might lead to lessen traffic accidents, I firmly believe that other remedial solutions can be adopted to mitigate this issue. There are numerous reasons why this notion is in favour of some, one of which is that young people always do things without thinking about the possible bad consequences. They do not recognize the importance of abiding by the rules, as they take a law unto themselves and deny responsibility for their manners. Hence, increasing an age limit for driving could be a rational decision to place a ban on them neither to violate the law nor cause accidents. In addition, what sets older people apart from youngsters is their experience with which they know how to deal with dangerous situations. To illustrate, if juvenile drivers come up against broken-down brakes, they might suddenly feel frightened, and they are more likely to be accident-prone. On the other hand, I am firmly of the opinion that imposing limitations on minimum driving age is not the best way to reduce driving offences, and other alternatives could be more practical. The first one is that the government should appear tough on driving delinquency. The stricter law is made, the fewer motorists break the law. Facing a heavy fine, younger drivers have no way to act within the law. For example, the law which stipulates that driving offenders are banned for life from commuting on the streets can act as a deterrent. Another measure is to promote people to use public transport instead of using private vehicles. Offered a reduced price as well as increasing frequency of buses or undergrounds, users feel more comfortable, which contributes to less use of personal cars. To sum up, raising the age of getting a driver's license could be one of the options, not the best. In my opinion, harsh penalties for delinquent motorists and persuading people to use public transportation can be other remedies to address this problem.
Every year, the death toll in road crashes experiences a marked increase. Raising the legal
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age
of adolescents
is believed
to be the best practice to guarantee road's safety. From my perspective, Although this safety measure might lead to lessen traffic accidents, I
firmly
believe that
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other
remedial solutions can
be adopted
to mitigate this issue.

There are numerous reasons why this notion is in
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favour
of
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some
, one of which is that young
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people
always do things without thinking about the possible
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bad
consequences. They do not recognize the importance of abiding by the
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rules
, as they take a
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law
unto themselves and deny responsibility for their manners.
Hence
, increasing an
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age
limit for
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driving
could be a rational decision to place a ban on them neither to violate the
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law
nor cause accidents.
In addition
, what sets older
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people
apart from youngsters is their experience with which they know how to deal with
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dangerous
situations. To illustrate, if juvenile drivers
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come
up against broken-down brakes, they might
suddenly
feel frightened, and they are more likely to be accident-prone.

On the
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other
hand, I am
firmly
of the opinion that imposing limitations on minimum
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driving
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age
is not the best way to
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reduce
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driving
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offences
, and
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other
alternatives could be more practical. The
first
one is that the
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government
should appear tough on
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driving
delinquency. The stricter
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law
is made
, the fewer motorists break the
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law
. Facing a heavy fine, younger drivers have no way to act within the
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law
.
For example
, the
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law
which stipulates that
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driving
offenders
are banned
for life from commuting on the streets can act as a deterrent. Another measure is to promote
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transport
instead
of using private vehicles. Offered a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
price
as well
as increasing frequency of buses or undergrounds, users feel more comfortable, which contributes to less
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of personal cars.

To sum up, raising the
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age
of getting a driver's license could be one of the options, not the best. In my opinion, harsh penalties for delinquent motorists and persuading
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transportation can be
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other
remedies to address this problem.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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