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Some people think that tests of drugs on animals should be carried out as this would improve public health. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that tests of drugs on animals should be carried out as this would improve public health. v. 2
Some assert that studies related to drugs should be conducted on animals so as to enhance the general health among people. However, I totally disagree with the point of view that any sort of tests on living creatures would be cruel to the wildlife. First and foremost, one cannot deny that government should do myriad actions to achieve better results in terms of public welfare. But it seems an absurd idea to test new medications on animals. More specifically, most of the animal organisms do not correspond with humans, meaning that new methods of administering various antibiotics should be structured and enforced for so-called laboratories where animals are entangled in cages. For instance, in some of African countries basic drug researches are being held for volunteers chosen by tribes who live in primitive conditions. Secondly, having been injected several times animals eventually possess immune to the drugs. As an outcome, even though investigations bear satisfying fruits, no one can assure that how those medications affect on an individual's at best, and at worst these can lead the public to suffer further problems, namely cardiovascular diseases or even obesity. Moreover, I opine that it would be completely unacceptable for animal rights, while subject matter experts themselves are trying to preserve animals from extinction and restore the precious fauna. In conclusion, although the fact that carrying out drug based tests on wild animals has been the most common way to introduce new medications to the public, I consider it rather biased and prejudiced opinion as animals play an essential part in the ecological chain.
Some
assert that studies related to
drugs
should
be conducted
on
animals
so as to
enhance the general health among
people
.
However
, I
totally
disagree with the point of view that any sort of
tests
on living creatures would be cruel to the wildlife.

First
and foremost, one cannot deny that
government
should do myriad actions to achieve better results in terms of public welfare.
But
it seems an absurd
idea
to
test
new medications on
animals
. More
specifically
, most of the
animal
organisms do not correspond with humans, meaning that new methods of administering various antibiotics should
be structured
and enforced for
so
-called laboratories where
animals
are entangled
in cages.
For instance
, in
some
of African countries basic
drug
researches are
being held
for volunteers chosen by tribes who
live
in primitive conditions.

Secondly
, having
been injected
several times
animals
eventually
possess immune to the
drugs
. As an outcome,
even though
investigations bear satisfying fruits, no one can assure that how those medications
affect
on an individual's at best, and at worst these can lead the public to suffer
further
problems,
namely
cardiovascular diseases or even obesity.
Moreover
, I opine that it would be completely unacceptable for
animal
rights, while
subject matter
experts themselves are trying to preserve
animals
from extinction and restore the precious fauna.
In conclusion
, although the fact that carrying out
drug
based
tests
on wild
animals
has been the most common way to introduce new medications to the public, I consider it
rather
biased and prejudiced opinion as
animals
play an essential part in the ecological chain.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that tests of drugs on animals should be carried out as this would improve public health. v. 2

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