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Some people think that television has destroyed communication among friend and family. Do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that television has destroyed communication among friend and family. X7dJ8
It is argued that many people believe that television has destroyed communication between friends and family. I however, completely agree with the idea of people has destroying communication among friends and family. There are a number of reason why should not people watch television. one possible reason is that people become addicted to watching television. by watching television people can to spent their quality time with family and friends. another reason is that they can no considered their study or work, when a people watch television they always try to watching unusefull things. For example nowadays younger people while day spent used mobile phone and television. that's why they feel uncomfortable to communicate with their family, friends and others people. And it is harmful their healthy and mentally.
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has destroying communication among
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family
. There are a number of reason why should not
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people
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people
become addicted to watching
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people
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friends
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considered their study or work, when a
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people
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they always try to
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unusefull
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people
while day spent
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television
.
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that
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family
,
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friends
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people
. And it is harmful their healthy and mentally.

IELTS essay Some people think that television has destroyed communication among friend and family.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
128 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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