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Some people think that teenage is great time to enjoy others say that adult has great time to enjoy and great deal with responsibility. Write about both side and give your own opinion.

Some people think that teenage is great time to enjoy others say that adult has great time to enjoy and great deal with responsibility. Write about both side and give your own opinion. MBNDL
Some people claim that teenage is the best time for enjoying. While other say that adulthood is great deal of taking responsibility and most joyful time. In my opinion, younger age is more enjoyable than adult time. First and foremost, in younger age, any person can stay healthy. Besides they can take many kinds of food. In addition, they can join any kinds of Sports. Everything, every moment they can enjoy with cheerfulness. Because almost of younger people has not that kind of illness which has a adult person. So they can do whatever they want. Moreover, an younger has cheerful mind. On the other hand, an adult person has many responsibility. For instance, they has to take families responsibility, children’s studying responsibility, works responsibility and so on. So that, they can not their life properly. They are always stressful. Beside that, their health condition go down gradually after increasing their age. For this reason he or she cannot take junk food. The people who is suffering diabetes, he or she can not take sugar more, oil, fast food. They has to obey dieting manue. They cannot participate every types of sports. Because it will be risky if they injured. So there are many restrictions for adult. On the contrary, in that adult time they can gain their prosperity as well as earn more. Because of
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claim that teenage is the best
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for enjoying. While other say that adulthood is great deal of taking
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responsibility
and most joyful
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time
. In my opinion,
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younger
age is more enjoyable than adult
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time
.
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and foremost, in
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age, any person can stay healthy.
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they can take
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many
kinds of
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.
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, they can
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any kinds of Sports. Everything, every moment they can enjoy with cheerfulness.
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younger
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people
has not that kind of illness which has
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adult person.
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they can do whatever they want.
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,
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has cheerful mind.
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, an adult person has
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to take families
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, children’s studying
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, works
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that, they can not their life
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. They are always stressful. Beside that, their health condition go down
gradually
after increasing their age.
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he or she cannot take junk food. The
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suffering diabetes, he or she can not take sugar more, oil,
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food. They
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to obey dieting
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. They cannot participate every
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of sports.
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it will be risky if they injured.
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there are
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restrictions for adult.
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, in that adult
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they can gain their prosperity
as well
as earn more.
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IELTS essay Some people think that teenage is great time to enjoy others say that adult has great time to enjoy and great deal with responsibility. Write about both side and give your own opinion.

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