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Comparing a stabilized bike and a real one

Comparing a stabilized bike and a real one APdbX
As you know, bike has an important role in our lives. We use it for going to school, work, or maybe exercising, and it goes without saying that it can be a cool option to buy as a gift if you want to make a kid happy; but have you ever thought about the best and useful bike you could afford? Indeed we have two major types of bicycle and according to their benefits, you can choose one. The first type is normal bikes which are used by most of the people and the second one is stabilized bikes which are mostly used by children and new beginners. In fact, stabilized bikes are normal bicycles with an extra pair of small wheels that can help beginners to ride without falling over. Now let's see which one is the best for you. First of all, stabilized kind is much slower than a normal one, so obviously, it is a stupid idea to send your children to school by these bikes. They'll probably get to school when it is closed! In this case you should be looking for a normal and fast kind of bike. Another difference between them is that stabilized bikes are famous because of the safety they give you and that's why most of the parents would rather buy them for their kids. Actually it depends on the person who wants to ride it. If your child is so scared of falling, then you can start from the stabilizers; however, if the person has enough courage, it's much better to start with a normal one in order to avoid from catching bad habits. I mean you know that you can't use the stabilizers till the end of time because you're not going to be a coward child forever! In the same way, we should also consider one more thing and it is that stabilizers are completely useless on uneven ground. Generally, stabilizers are keeping your bike upright, only if the surface is flat. Otherwise, you should expect falling from the bike and getting your knees injured very badly. So by any chance, if you're living on the mountain or on another bumpy planet, do not pick the stabilized bike unless you really want to know how bad breaking your bones and head could be! I guess I said enough. Now it's your term to go and buy a nice bike according to my long, useful essay.
As you know,
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bike
has an
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important
role in our
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lives
. We
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use
it for going to school, work, or maybe exercising, and it goes without saying that it can be a cool option to
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buy
as a gift if you want to
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make
a kid happy;
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but
have you ever
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thought
about the best and useful
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bike
you could afford?
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Indeed
we have two major types of bicycle and according to their benefits, you can choose one.

The
first
type is
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normal
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bikes
which are
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used
by most of the
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people
and the second one is
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stabilized
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bikes
which are
mostly
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used
by children and new beginners. In fact,
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stabilized
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bikes
are
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normal
bicycles with an extra pair of
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small
wheels that can
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help
beginners to ride without falling over.
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Now
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let
's
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see
which one is the best for you.
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First of all
,
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stabilized
kind is much slower than a
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normal
one,
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so
obviously
, it is a stupid
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idea
to
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send
your children to school by these
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bikes
. They'll
probably
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get
to school when it
is closed
!
In this case
you should be looking for a
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normal
and
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fast
kind of bike.

Another difference between them is that
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stabilized
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bikes
are
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famous
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because
of the safety they give you and that's why most of the parents would
rather
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buy
them for their kids. Actually it depends on the person who wants to ride it. If your child is
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so
scared of falling, then you can
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start
from the
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stabilizers
;
however
, if the person has
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enough
courage, it's much better to
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start
with a
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normal
one in order to avoid from catching
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bad
habits. I mean you know that you can't
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use
the
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stabilizers
till the
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end
of time
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because
you're not going to be a coward child forever!

In the same way
, we should
also
consider one more thing and it is that
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stabilizers
are completely useless on uneven ground.
Generally
,
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stabilizers
are keeping your
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bike
upright,
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only
if the surface is flat.
Otherwise
, you should
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expect
falling from the
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bike
and getting your knees injured
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very
badly
.
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So
by any chance, if you're living on the mountain or on another bumpy planet, do not pick the
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stabilized
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bike
unless you
really
want to know how
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bad
breaking your bones and head could be!

I guess I said
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enough
.
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Now
it's your term to go and
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buy
a nice
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bike
according to my long, useful essay.
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IELTS essay Comparing a stabilized bike and a real one

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
407 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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