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Some people think that students should work and earn their own money/ do you agree or not?

Some people think that students should work and earn their own money/ do you agree or not? 0Aqkn

I agree with this opinion because the students need to have their own pocket money and at the same time they will get experience. Firstly, students will have the money for their needs, and won’t ask their parents for it. In addition, as the learning is paid they can help their parents and pay the fees themselves. Secondly, they will get an experience, for instance: learn more, acquire the working skills, which is very important for the future employment. Furthermore their CV will be filled with experience column. So, if students want and need they should work and study at the same time

I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this opinion This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 the students need to have their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 pocket money and at the same time they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 experience.

Firstly
, students will have the money for their needs, and won’t ask their parents for it. In addition
, as the learning is paid
 they can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 their parents and pay the fees themselves.

Secondly
, they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 an experience, for instance
: learn more, acquire the working This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
, which is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 for the future employment. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Furthermore,
Furthermore
 their CV will be filled
 with experience column.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, if students want and need they should work and study at the same time