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Some people think that staying in hotels is not a good option to know about a country or its people. What do you think about this viewpoint? v.2

Some people think that staying in hotels is not a good option to know about a country or its people. What do you think about this viewpoint? v. 2
with the passage of time, various lodgings has become available for travelling people. However, some persons believe that it is not helpful in learning about the country and inhabitants. In my viewpoint, staying in hotel can be both good and bad depending on aesthetics and workings of the place. As for why people think it is not a good idea to stay in the hotel, there are umpteen reasons. The main one is that most of the tourist dwelling of present day are matched with the needs of worldwide public than host country environment which contributes to less awareness of the nations uniqueness. For instance, 5 star hotels in India often constructed while keeping the needs of worldwide audience in mind which leaves little space for cultural and traditional things. However, I do not completely agree with this notion as there are some suits which help to keep the uniqueness of culture and traditions of the country. A fine example of this is Ryokan - a traditional Japanese inn which typically features tatami-matted rooms, communal baths and several other facilities such as allowing people to wear national cloth (Yukata) and so on. In addition, it is much easier to live in a hotel with colleagues and fellow tourists then the native people who are stranger to every traveller. Beside this, there are many other ways of gaining knowledge about the country and its indigenous population like visiting historical places, meeting native people, reading books and etcetera. To end, whether to stay in the hotel or the live-in facilities provided by native people, it is a persons choice than the public. As, everyone feel comfort in different environments.
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the passage of time, various lodgings has become available for travelling
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people
.
However
,
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some
persons believe that it is not helpful in learning about the
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country
and inhabitants. In my viewpoint, staying in
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hotel
can be both
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good
and
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bad
depending on aesthetics and workings of the place.

As for why
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people
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think
it is not a
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good
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idea
to stay in the
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hotel
, there are umpteen reasons. The main one is that most of the tourist dwelling of present day
are matched
with the needs of worldwide
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public
than host
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country
environment which contributes to less awareness of the
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nations
uniqueness.
For instance
,
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5 star
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hotels
in India
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often
constructed while keeping the needs of worldwide audience in mind which
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leaves
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little
space for cultural and traditional things.

However
, I do not completely
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agree
with this notion as there are
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some
suits which
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help
to
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keep
the uniqueness of culture and traditions of the
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country
. A fine example of this is
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Ryokan
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a traditional Japanese inn which
typically
features tatami-matted rooms, communal baths and several other facilities such as allowing
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people
to wear national cloth (
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Yukata
) and
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so
on.
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, it is much easier to
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live
in a
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hotel
with colleagues and fellow tourists then the native
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people
who are stranger to every
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traveller
. Beside this, there are
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many
other ways of gaining knowledge about the
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country
and its indigenous population like visiting historical places, meeting native
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people
, reading books and etcetera.

To
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end
, whether to stay in the
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hotel
or the
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live
-in facilities provided by native
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people
, it is a persons
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choice
than the public.
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, everyone
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feel
comfort in
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different
environments.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
A foreign language is like a frail, delicate muscle. If you do not use it, it weakens.
Jhumpa Lahiri

IELTS essay Some people think that staying in hotels is not a good option to know about a country or its people. What do you think about this viewpoint? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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