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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others thinks that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.3

Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others thinks that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. v. 3
Momentarily, due to the advancement of the technology research on the cosmos has been explored drastically, which requires a large number of possessions and money. This essay will discuss the points why, some individual opine that this type of activity is a crucial for community while, others disharmonise against this. I strongly support the former view. To begin with, the main important reason is that after doing an investigation of the cosmos on should get the knowledge of the different planets, even able to find out the details of temperature and human being availability. Moreover, doing this type of research a person can reach to different planets and make the observation regarding, whether it would be possible to leave for a mankind. For example, one of the research institute of India, ISRO is working on the project Mangal, it would be possible for the layman to live and survive at such place. Thus, after doing search scrutiny helps the country to expansion of their growth and familiarity. On the other hand, some people say that to do such investigation needs large amount of funds, so they think that this money should be spent on other things, which helps the country and society as well. Firstly, sometimes to perform such research may be failing because of any technical fault, even this will result in the loss of a large amount of fund and make the atmosphere polluted as erosion of the gas would be generated by the fuel consumption. Furthermore, this activity makes land rigid, this would not use for agriculture or civilization. Thus, some bourgeois suggest to spend such money on recreation activity which helps in the development of the community. In conclusion, exploration of the space demands the large amount of money and attention as helping in the development of the nation, while this will also create some detrimental effect on the atmosphere, but this would be managed by the government by taking prevention steps.
Momentarily
, due to the advancement of the technology
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research
on the cosmos has
been explored
drastically
, which requires a
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large
number of possessions and
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money
. This essay will discuss the points why,
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some
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individual
opine that this type of activity is a crucial for community while, others
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disharmonise
against this. I
strongly
support the former view.

To
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begin
with, the main
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important
reason is that after doing an investigation of the cosmos on should
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get
the knowledge of the
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different
planets, even able to find out the
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details
of temperature and human being availability.
Moreover
, doing this type of
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research
a person can reach to
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different
planets and
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make
the observation regarding, whether it would be possible to
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leave
for a mankind.
For example
, one of the
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research
institute of India, ISRO is working on the project
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Mangal
, it would be possible for the layman to
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live
and survive at such place.
Thus
, after doing search scrutiny
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helps
the country to expansion of their growth and familiarity.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
say that to do such investigation needs
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large
amount of funds,
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so
they
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think
that this
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money
should
be spent
on other things, which
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helps
the country and society
as well
.
Firstly
,
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sometimes
to perform such
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research
may be failing
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because
of any technical fault, even this will result in the loss of a
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large
amount of fund and
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make
the atmosphere polluted as erosion of the gas would
be generated
by the fuel consumption.
Furthermore
, this activity
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makes
land rigid, this would not
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use
for agriculture or civilization.
Thus
,
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some
bourgeois
The verb 'suggest' is used with the gerund form: "suggest spending".
suggest to spend
such
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money
on recreation activity which
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helps
in the development of the community.

In conclusion
, exploration of the space demands the
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large
amount of
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money
and attention as helping in the development of the nation, while this will
also
create
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some
detrimental effect on the atmosphere,
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but
this would
be managed
by the
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government
by taking prevention steps.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others thinks that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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