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Some people think that for robots are very important to you human future development. other think that they are dangerous and have negative effect on society discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that for robots are very important to you human future development. other think that they are dangerous and have negative effect on society v. 1
In the era of digital, technology is being played vital role in everyone's soul. Technology has made many advancement factors for the soul better of people such as washing machine oven etc. Robots are very important to the human imminent growth, which is estimated by the some individuals. However, other people opine that they are perilous and have many negative influences on the community. The upcoming paragraphs will not only examine the both viewpoints, but also my own opinion. To commence with, some people claim that robots are the most significant role in the human forthcoming development. First of all it saves the time of the public, as people are very busy in their daily routine, they work hard for earning a lot of money from their company. But they do not get opportunity spend time with friends as well as family, if they use equipments, which are used in their house. They can pressure their hobbies and utilise time with others. Therefore some layman considers that machineries are better for the human planned growth. Besides this, they can do the job, if they are using gadgets. It is faster, convenient as well as comfortable. To illustrate, only women work their household chores, if they used kitchen gadgets. Which will be very beneficial for them, and they can go from working outside. On the flip side, others opine that robots have negative effects for the human future progressive, because robots are dangers. First and foremost point is that, as we know very well it become people lazy as well as addict some diseases. For example, some people use machines in not the limit. It impacts on the human growth of health. In this way, they addict some disease like heart, fever, cold, any others which will be not good for the human impending heart. To conclude, although robots have both negative and positive effects on the human activity. According to mine, it has more advantages than disadvantages. The use of robots will rise in the planned, which will be very useful for the people.
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vital role in everyone's soul. Technology has made
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advancement factors for the soul better of
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people
such as washing machine oven etc. Robots are
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very
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important
to the
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human
imminent growth, which
is estimated
by the
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some
individuals.
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,
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other
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people
opine that they are perilous and have
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many
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negative
influences on the community. The upcoming paragraphs will not
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examine the both viewpoints,
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also
my
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opinion.

To commence with,
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some
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people
claim that robots are the most significant role in the
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human
forthcoming development.
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it saves the time of the public, as
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are
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busy in their daily routine, they work
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for earning
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money from their
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company
.
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they do not
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opportunity spend time with friends as
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as family, if they
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equipments, which are
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in their
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. They can pressure their hobbies and
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time with others.
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Therefore
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some
layman considers that
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machineries
are better for the
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human
planned growth.
Besides
this, they can do the job, if they are using gadgets. It is faster, convenient as
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well
as comfortable. To illustrate,
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only
women work their household chores, if they
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used
kitchen gadgets. Which will be
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very
beneficial for them, and they can go from working outside.

On the flip side, others opine that robots have
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effects for the
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human
future progressive,
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robots are
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dangers
.
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and foremost point is that, as we know
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it become
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lazy as
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as addict
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diseases.
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,
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people
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machines in not the limit. It impacts on the
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human
growth of health. In this way, they addict
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some
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disease
like heart, fever,
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cold
, any others which will be not
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good
for the
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impending heart.

To conclude
, although robots have both
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negative
and
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positive
effects on the
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activity. According to mine, it has more advantages than disadvantages. The
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use
of robots will rise in the planned, which will be
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very
useful for the
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people
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that for robots are very important to you human future development. other think that they are dangerous and have negative effect on society v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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