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Some people think that some types of criminals should not go to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work in the community. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that some types of criminals should not go to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work in the community. m7wd
Owing to the great variety of crimes that can be punishable by prison, some people argue that not all criminals deserve such strict measures and, it would be more appropriate to give some community services instead. One justification that can be given for prisons is to save society by removing criminals from the streets. So the first thing to consider when someone has broken the law is the level of danger to other people. In the case of violent crime, it has to be appropriate to keep the offender away from the outer world. However, there are cases, such as burglary or possession of drugs, which do not involve violence against society. Keeping these types of criminals in prisons is an extra bargain for taxpayers and predominantly does not prevent future crimes. In other words, after being released, people like these commit the same crimes. As for me, punishments should reform people so, they do not re-offend. Another reason not to put these people in prison is that they may mix with more dangerous criminals and potentially might commit a worse crime after being released. By keeping them in the community, we help them gain new skills and develop sympathy and compassion for others. It occurs, society can only benefit. Critics of the rehabilitative approach to criminals declare that justice should be harsh in order to prevent further crime commitment. However, there is little evidence that long prison sentences deter criminals. To conclude, putting criminals who are not a danger to society in prison is expansive for the authorities and ineffective, both as a deterrent and as a form of rehabilitation. Unpaid work in the community for non-violent criminals can be beneficial for both society and the offender. I strongly believe that decisions of how to react to some types of crooks should be bases on what actually works.
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that can be punishable by
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prison
,
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some
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people
argue that not all
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criminals
deserve such strict measures and, it would be more appropriate to give
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some
community services
instead
.

One justification that can be
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given
for
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prisons
is to save
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society
by removing
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criminals
from the streets.
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So
the
first
thing to consider when someone has broken the law is the level of
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danger
to other
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people
. In the case of violent
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crime
, it
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has to
be appropriate to
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keep
the offender away from the outer world.
However
, there are cases, such as burglary or possession of drugs, which do not involve violence against
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society
. Keeping these types of
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criminals
in
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prisons
is an extra bargain for taxpayers and
predominantly
does not
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prevent
future
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crimes
.
In other words
, after
being released
,
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people
like these commit the same crimes.

As for me, punishments should reform
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people
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so
, they do not re-offend.

Another reason not to put these
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people
in
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prison
is that they may mix with more
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dangerous
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criminals
and
potentially
might commit a worse
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crime
after
being released
. By keeping them in the community, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them gain new
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skills
and develop sympathy and compassion for others.

It occurs,
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society
can
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only
benefit.

Critics of the rehabilitative approach to
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criminals
declare that justice should be harsh in order to
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prevent
further
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crime
commitment.
However
, there is
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little
evidence that long
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prison
sentences deter criminals.

To conclude
, putting
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criminals
who are not a
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danger
to
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society
in
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prison
is expansive for the authorities and ineffective, both as a deterrent and as a form of rehabilitation. Unpaid work in the community for non-violent
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criminals
can be beneficial for both
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society
and the offender. I
strongly
believe that decisions of how to react to
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some
types of crooks should be bases on what actually works.
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IELTS essay Some people think that some types of criminals should not go to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work in the community.

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7 paragraphs
309 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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