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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. pRa73
Social networking platforms have become part of people’s lives, but according to some, the overuse of social media has also caused some problems in our society. In my opinion, I think there are some negative aspects of social networking sites, but the positive parts cannot be ignored. Admittedly, there are some fundamental disadvantages of social media. Firstly, being constantly online cuts people off from their immediate surroundings and disrupts face-to-face communication. This drives us further apart and our everyday reality is gradually being supplanted by virtual worlds. Secondly, anonymity and the absence of direct interaction can promote an uncivil or even aggressive style of communication, which becomes the reason why some are becoming the victims of cyberbully. Furthermore, social media platforms are too often used to spread malicious gossip or false information, which will mislead the public and affect the harmonious(harmony) of society. (society’s harmony) Nevertheless, despite the negative impacts above, I believe social networking sites bring people closer together and benefit communication. On the one hand, social media makes spoken and written communication between people possible anytime, anywhere. Everyone can find countless like-minded people with whom they can share thoughts, photographs and life experiences. With social networks, tracking down long-lost friends is relatively simple. On the other hand, social media provides a platform for people to discuss local or international issues and may influence political decisions. People will have more opportunities to take part in(participate in) the government’s decision-making and feel a sense of belonging to the states.
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networking platforms have become part of
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,
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some
, the overuse of
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media
has
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some
problems in our society. In my opinion, I
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think
there are
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negative
aspects of
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social
networking sites,
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but
the
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positive
parts cannot be
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ignored
.

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, there are
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some
fundamental disadvantages of
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social
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media
.
Firstly
, being
constantly
online
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cuts
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people
off from their immediate surroundings and disrupts face-to-face
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communication
. This drives us
further
apart and our everyday reality is
gradually
being supplanted
by virtual worlds.
Secondly
, anonymity and the absence of direct interaction can promote an uncivil or even aggressive style of
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communication
, which becomes the reason why
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some
are becoming the victims of
cyberbully
.
Furthermore
,
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social
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media
platforms are too
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often
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used
to spread malicious gossip or false information, which will mislead the public and affect the harmonious(harmony) of society. (society’s harmony)

Nevertheless
, despite the
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negative
impacts above, I believe
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social
networking sites bring
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people
closer together and benefit
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communication
. On the one hand,
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social
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media
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makes
spoken and written
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communication
between
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people
possible anytime, anywhere. Everyone can find countless like-minded
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people
with whom they can share thoughts, photographs and life experiences. With
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social
networks, tracking down long-lost friends is
relatively
simple.
On the other hand
,
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social
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media
provides a platform for
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people
to discuss local or international issues and may influence political decisions.
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People
will have more opportunities to
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take part
in(participate in) the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
’s decision-making and feel a sense of belonging to the states.
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IELTS essay Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
249 words
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