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Some people think that social media has had a negative effect on young people's behavior

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On the one hand, some people think social media sites have affected children's behavior. They argue that it has affected family relationships and ade chi anxious is that they cannot read their children's posts on social media pages. On the other hand, some people feel it gives children more opportunities to socialize with their friends, Many parents nowadays do not allow children to play outside so much, however, cather than ignore their friends, children now have an online network. I agree with the second opinion because it is important for children to have close friendships and even before social media many children had difficult relationships with their parents. 5 social with adults. Another factor that makes parents
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IELTS essay Some people think that social media has had a negative effect on young people's behavior

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
116 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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