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Some people think that sense of competition should be encouraged in children. However, others consider cooperation more important to make them good adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that sense of competition should be encouraged in children. However, others consider cooperation more important to make them good adults. WEmJ5
Equipment for children necessary skills will help child confident in their life. In which, opposition and team work are inevitable On the one hand, competition helps children learn that it is not always the best or the smartest who succeed, but that hard work, perseverance and determination also play an important role on the road to success. For example, contention in studying will help children know how to give your best effort to achieve high scores and courage to face difficulties. On the other hand, someone respects teach young children how to cooperation because mutual help in the contract is very important. Teacher can for child contact with cooperation. For example, when children know team work, they will find a way so solve problems quickly and improve work effiviency. In conclusion, if your children learns skills like resistance and assistance, they will step with confidence into the lives and that is what kids need now
Equipment for
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necessary
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skills
will
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help
child confident in their life. In which, opposition and team
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work
are
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inevitable


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helps
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children
learn that it is not always the best or the smartest who succeed,
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that
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hard
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work
, perseverance and determination
also
play an
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important
role on the road to success.
For example
, contention in studying will
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help
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children
know how to give your best effort to achieve high scores and courage to face difficulties.

On the other hand
, someone respects teach young
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children
how to cooperation
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mutual
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help
in the contract is
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very
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important
. Teacher can for child contact with cooperation.
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, when
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children
know team
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work
, they will find a way
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so
solve problems
quickly
and
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improve
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work
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effiviency
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, if your
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children
learns
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like resistance and assistance, they will step with confidence into the
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IELTS essay Some people think that sense of competition should be encouraged in children. However, others consider cooperation more important to make them good adults.

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  American English
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154 words
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