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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.7

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 7
Streaming has been becoming one part of every school since the 21st century. Nevertheless, some groups of people think that grouping of students according to their academic abilities is more advantageous while others think that it is more beneficial to have student together as per their different abilities. What is more suitable is discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The prime reason why students should be divided according to their academic abilities is convenient for teachers. To simplify this, is is easier for the teacher to make intelligent student learn about the topic. For instance, in school one class is having all clever students and one student have problems in solving a math sum, then it is not mandatory to learn that sum with the help of only faculty but it can also be solved by asking any of the classmates. So it is time saving for teachers and teachers can get enough time to do some other extra activities. In contrast, grouping is not good for those students who are weak. Students will feel inferior by grouping. Furthermore, teachers may only concentrate on the intelligent students. The significant reason of having students together with different abilities of students is to get motivated. In other words, if different ability students are sitting together in one class, then students will motivate to get good marks. For example, one class is having weak and clever students so that weaker student will get encouragement from clever student and he or she will work hard to get good outcomes. What is more, communication skills will be improved by having various ability students together. In closure, it is more beneficial to having different ability students studying together in order for them all-around development.
Streaming has been becoming one part of every school since the 21st century.
Nevertheless
,
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some
groups of
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people
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think
that grouping of
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students
according to their academic
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abilities
is more advantageous while others
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think
that it is more beneficial to have
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student
together as per their
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different
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abilities
.
What is more
suitable
is discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs.

The prime reason why
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students
should
be divided
according to their academic
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abilities
is convenient for
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teachers
. To simplify this,
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is is
easier for the
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teacher
to
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make
intelligent
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student
learn about the topic.
For instance
, in school one
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class
is
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having
all clever
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students
and one
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student
have problems in solving a math sum, then it is not mandatory to learn that sum with the
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help
of
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only
faculty
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but
it can
also
be solved
by asking any of the classmates.
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So
it is time saving for
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teachers
and
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teachers
can
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get
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enough
time to do
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some
other extra activities.
In contrast
, grouping is not
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good
for those
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students
who are weak.
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Students
will feel inferior by grouping.
Furthermore
,
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teachers
may
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only
concentrate on the intelligent students.

The significant reason of
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having
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students
together with
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different
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abilities
of
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students
is to
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get
motivated.
In other words
, if
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different
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ability
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students
are sitting together in one
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class
, then
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students
will motivate to
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get
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good
marks.
For example
, one
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class
is
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having
weak and clever
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students
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so
that weaker
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student
will
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get
encouragement from clever
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student and
he or she will work
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hard
to
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get
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good
outcomes.
What is more
, communication
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skills
will be
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improved
by
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having
various
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ability
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students
together.

In closure, it is more beneficial to
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having
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different
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ability
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students
studying together in order for them all-around development.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
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