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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.3

uch time is being spent in school to teach subjects like History. It would be beneficial if more time is spent in imparting vocational training to students which, in the long run, will help them to earn a living. I partially agree with this view because in my opinion, though teaching practical skills is important, other core subjects like History, Geography, and Literature have their advantages too. In this essay, I will shed some light on this point of view. It cannot be refuted that in today's times of globalisation, vocational training is very important for securing jobs. Firstly, in today's job market, more skilled and technically sound workers are needed. Since vocational training gives hands-on experience and is practical oriented, it helps a student to survive the pressures of a particular job in the real world. Secondly, vocational training is specifically beneficial to students who, due to financial or intellectual constraints, are unable to pursue tertiary level education. Last but not the least, vocational training is practical and its inclusion in the school curriculum may help a student to understand where his aptitude lies. In future, the student may pursue that stream for further studies. To illustrate, a student who has discovered her passion and skill for stitching and embroidery may take it to the next level after school by enrolling in a full-fledged fashion designing school. On the other hand, it is true that teaching traditional core subject is equally important because the aim of any form of education is to impart knowledge while removing ignorance. Firstly, basic knowledge of these subjects at school level helps in widening the overall outlook of a student towards the world. It helps in the all-round development of a student. For example, the study of history is actually the study of mankind which familiarizes us to our roots, customs, and values. A person without basic knowledge of history is like a fallen leaf who doesn't know to which tree it belonged. Secondly, while studying these traditional subjects, a student may realise his liking for the subject and may be inclined to pursue higher studies in that field. It would be too naive to say that higher studies in subjects like History and Geography do not have job prospects. Finally, a well-equipped and knowledgeable person is an asset to the society. In conclusion, I believe that although teaching job oriented practical skills at school level is very beneficial, it is also true that a basic knowledge about other subjects like History is essential for overall growth and development in school life and beyond.
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. It would be beneficial if more time
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help
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in my opinion, though teaching
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practical
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skills
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, other core
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like
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History
, Geography, and Literature have their advantages too. In this essay, I will shed
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some
light on this point of view.

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today
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, vocational
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for securing
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jobs
.
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, in
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today
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market, more skilled and
technically
sound workers
are needed
. Since vocational
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training
gives hands-on experience and is
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practical
oriented, it
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helps
a
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student
to survive the pressures of a particular
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job
in the real world.
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, vocational
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training
is
specifically
beneficial to
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students
who, due to financial or intellectual constraints, are unable to pursue tertiary
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level
education. Last
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but
not the least, vocational
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training
is
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practical
and its inclusion in the
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school
curriculum may
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help
a
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student
to understand where his aptitude lies.
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, the
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student
may pursue that stream for
further
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studies
. To illustrate, a
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student
who has discovered her passion and
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skill
for stitching and embroidery may take it to the
next
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level
after
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school
by enrolling in a full-fledged fashion designing school.

On the other hand
, it is true that teaching traditional core
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subject
is
equally
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important
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because
the aim of any form of education is to impart
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knowledge
while removing ignorance.
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, basic
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knowledge
of these
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subjects
at
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school
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level
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helps
in widening the
overall
outlook of a
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student
towards the world. It
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helps
in the all-round development of a
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student
.
For example
, the
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study
of
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history
is actually the
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study
of mankind which familiarizes us to our roots, customs, and values. A person without basic
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knowledge
of
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history
is like a fallen leaf who doesn't know to which tree it belonged.
Secondly
, while studying these traditional
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subjects
, a
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student
may
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realise
his liking for the
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subject
and may
be inclined
to pursue higher
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studies
in that field. It would be too naive to say that higher
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studies
in
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subjects
like
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History
and Geography do not have
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job
prospects.
Finally
, a well-equipped and knowledgeable person is an asset to the society.

In conclusion
, I believe that although teaching
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job
oriented
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practical
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skills
at
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school
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level
is
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very
beneficial, it is
also
true that a basic
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knowledge
about other
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subjects
like
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History
is essential for
overall
growth and development in
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school
life and beyond.
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IELTS essay Schools are spending more time teaching the traditional subjects such as History. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills which can help students to get a job. It is often argued that too m

Essay
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4 paragraphs
430 words
6.0
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