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Some people think that school students should learn the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on other more important subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that school students should learn the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on other more important subjects. GmYg
Although it is sometimes thought that the science of food and the preparation of them ought to be taught to school pupils, other people believe that spending pupils’ time on more essential topics is necessary. In my opinion, I consider that learning more critical science such as maths or data science could help children in their future life. On the one hand, a number of people think that students who learn food science at schools can cope with an extraordinary situation such as a shortage. In other words, learning and preparing about vital food knowledge supports children to excel in their daily tasks especially in challenging situations like covid-19 lockdown. For instance, lots of people scared of this situation during the pandemic but other ones were able to deal with their fears easily. And they prepared their own foods and dishes. Furthermore, doing something on their own particularly basic needs like that boosts your confidence substantially. On the other hand, it is often believed that other crucial subjects such as data science, maths so on are more important than food science for school students due to the fact that, as people, we will live in a digital world in the not-too-distant future and I agree. Should children learn this type of crucial topic, they will have a marvellous opportunity to find a place in the job market in their career. Another reason why this type of skill is useful for children is that learning maths, physics, and so on could develop children's brains significantly and they gain new approaches to solve critical problems rapidly. In conclusion, while people may vary their opinions, I think that school pupils stand a better chance to succeed both in their professional and private life with skills in more significant sciences.
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pupils,
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other
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believe that spending pupils’ time on more essential topics is necessary. In my opinion, I consider that learning more critical
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science
such as
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maths
or data
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science
could
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help
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children
in their future life.

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people
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think
that students who learn
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food
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science
at
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schools
can cope with an extraordinary situation such as a shortage. In
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other
words, learning and preparing about vital
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food
knowledge supports
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children
to excel in their daily tasks
especially
in challenging situations like
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covid-19
lockdown.
For instance
, lots of
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people
scared of this situation during the pandemic
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but
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other
ones were able to deal with their fears
easily
. And they prepared their
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own
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foods
and dishes.
Furthermore
, doing something on their
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own
particularly
basic needs like that boosts your confidence
substantially
.

On the
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other
hand, it is
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often
believed that
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other
crucial subjects such as data
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science
,
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maths
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so
on are more
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important
than
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food
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science
for
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school
students due to the fact that, as
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people
, we will
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live
in a digital world in the not-too-distant future and I
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agree
. Should
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children
learn this type of crucial topic, they will have a
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marvellous
opportunity to find a place in the job market in their career. Another reason why this type of
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skill
is useful for
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children
is that learning
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maths
, physics, and
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so
on could develop children's brains
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significantly and
they gain new approaches to solve critical problems
rapidly
.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary their opinions, I
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think
that
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school
pupils stand a better chance to succeed both in their professional and private life with
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skills
in more significant
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sciences
.

IELTS essay Some people think that school students should learn the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on other more important subjects.

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