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Some people think that preventive measures are the best bet against a pandemic; others however believe that our attention and resources should be diverted to medical interventions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that preventive measures are the best bet against a pandemic; others however believe that our attention and resources should be diverted to medical interventions. e50WG
In this pandemic world, we are in the situation which we never thought and predict before it started. Some people in a group believe that follow preventive measures should be the better option to stay away from Covid-19 and other think that we have no control over people and spread of disease then we should have to provide more resources and efforts to the health system. In my opinion, social distancing and put a mask on the face while you are outside is the best thing to bet this lockdown. On the one hand, a group of community is saying that obey authority rules and regulation of this lockdown would be safer to keep yourself healthy. The primary rule people should keep in mind is to avoid going outside if it is avoidable and keep social distancing from people in public places. Also, one should have to quarantine if he/she travelled to another country. Because the disease is airborne people should always put a cover on the face to eliminate this pandemic situation as early as possible. For example, many countries found where people were strickly obeying the ministry rules, they got out of this pandemic quickly. Thus, we can win over this situation by following regulations to keep us safe. On the contrast, people argue that the medical system and medical officials are responsible to get us out from this lockdown situation. To cure the illness and for the well-being of people, hospitals should be up-to-date with new technologies and required equipment for treatments. This group believe the political fund should be provided to the hospitals for extra care of Covid-19 and have to arrange ventilators according to the population of the country. Is it worth to end this pandemic by wearing a mask and avoiding places? question asked by this community. In conclusion, my opinion is to practising social distancing and wearing a mask has gradually down the number of Covid-19 cases around the globe. I agree that government and medical officials should improve health system but the first step starts with an individual.
In this pandemic world, we are in the
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which we never
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thought
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it
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started
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Some
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people
in a group believe that follow preventive measures should be the better option to stay away from Covid-19 and other
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think
that we have no control over
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people
and spread of disease then we should
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have to
provide more resources and efforts to the health system. In my opinion, social distancing and put a mask on the face while you are outside is the best thing to bet this lockdown.

On the one hand, a group of community is saying that obey authority
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rules
and regulation of this lockdown would be safer to
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keep
yourself healthy. The primary
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rule
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people
should
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keep
in mind is to avoid going outside if it is avoidable and
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keep
social distancing from
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people
in public places.
Also
, one should
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have to
quarantine if he/she travelled to another country.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
the disease is airborne
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people
should always put a cover on the face to eliminate this pandemic
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situation
as early as possible.
For example
,
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many
countries found where
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people
were
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strickly
obeying the ministry
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rules
, they
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got
out of this pandemic
quickly
.
Thus
, we can win over this
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situation
by following regulations to
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keep
us safe.

On the contrast,
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people
argue that the medical system and medical officials are responsible to
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get
us out from this lockdown
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situation
. To cure the illness and for the well-being of
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people
, hospitals should be up-to-date with new technologies and required equipment for treatments.
The verb 'believe' is plural. Did you mean: "This group believes"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
This group believe
the political fund should
be provided
to the hospitals for extra care of Covid-19 and
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have to
arrange ventilators according to the population of the country. Is it worth to
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end
this pandemic by wearing a mask and avoiding places?
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question
asked by this community.

In conclusion
, my opinion is
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to practising
social distancing and wearing a mask has
gradually
down the number of Covid-19 cases around the globe. I
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agree
that
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government
and medical officials should
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improve
health system
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but
the
first
step
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starts
with an individual.
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IELTS essay Some people think that preventive measures are the best bet against a pandemic; others however believe that our attention and resources should be diverted to medical interventions.

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