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Some people think that politicians have the great importance on the world. other people however, believe that scientists have the great influence. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that politicians have the great importance on the world. other people however, believe that scientists have the great influence. LQMG
It has been considered by few individuals that political leader plays significant role in world, others believe that scientists have the greatest influence on the world. This essay intends to elaborate the both your perspective in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, there are a lot of reasons why political leaders are very important for public. First of all with the assist of political, they can maintain peaceful environment in their nation because politicians implement various types of laws which put positive influence on citizen. For example, in 2014 government of America has banned the use of plastic bag which has assist to ameliorate the condition of environment. Moreover, politicians are not only implement the law they also, motivate the public to do hard work. Government caters different types of facilities which help to public ameliorate their lifestyle such as provide pensions to older persons, scholarship to students, bonus and jobs to adults. Therefore, individuals believe that government play important role in world. On the flip side, there are some individuals who think that scientists are significant for world. firstly, nowadays human beings has different types of technical gadgets, equipments which are invented by scientist. With the assistance of these equipment, individuals can complete their task within few minutes. For example, in Japan there are many industries which use machines and complete their work in short time. Further more, scientists prevent human beings from harmful aliment by inventing new medicine, such as by inventing the vaccine of COVID-19, scientist have prevented the world from harmful virus. As a result, it is an undeniable fact that scientists have important for human beings. To conclude, according to my perspective, although leaders implement various types of laws which enhance the living style of public and maintain the peaceful atmosphere in country but scientists have greatest influence on public because they provide various amenities which make public life smooth and up-to-date.
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been considered
by few
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individuals
that political leader plays significant role in
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world
, others believe that
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scientists
have the greatest influence on the
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world
. This essay intends to elaborate the both your perspective in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, there are
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a lot of
reasons why political leaders are
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very
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important
for
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public
.
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with the assist of political, they can maintain peaceful environment in their nation
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because
politicians implement various
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types
of laws which put
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positive
influence on citizen.
For example
, in 2014
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government
of America has banned the
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use
of plastic bag which has
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assist
to ameliorate the condition of environment.
Moreover
, politicians are not
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only
implement the law they
also
, motivate the
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public
to do
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hard
work.
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Government
caters
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different
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types
of facilities which
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help
to
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public
ameliorate their lifestyle such as provide pensions to older persons, scholarship to students, bonus and jobs to adults.
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,
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individuals
believe that
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government
play
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important
role in
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world
. On the flip side, there are
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some
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individuals
who
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think
that
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scientists
are significant for
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world
.
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firstly
, nowadays human beings has
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different
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types
of technical gadgets, equipments which
are invented
by
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scientist
. With the assistance of
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these equipment
,
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individuals
can complete their task within few minutes.
For example
, in Japan there are
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many
industries which
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use
machines and complete their work in short time.
Further
more,
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scientists
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prevent
human beings from harmful aliment by inventing new medicine, such as by inventing the vaccine of COVID-19,
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scientist
have
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prevented
the
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world
from harmful virus.
As a result
, it is an undeniable fact that
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scientists
have
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important
for human beings.
To conclude
, according to my perspective, although leaders implement various
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types
of laws which enhance the living style of
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public
and maintain the peaceful atmosphere in country
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but
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scientists
have
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greatest
influence on
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public
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because
they provide various amenities which
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make
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public
life smooth and up-to-date.
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IELTS essay Some people think that politicians have the great importance on the world. other people however, believe that scientists have the great influence.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
316 words
5.5
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