Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that sports are essential for bodily power while, others argue that mental energy is more necessary. Health is always play a chief role in our life rather its mental or physical. Although, some people trust that looking good or well-being in front of others you should pay attention on your fitness. Firstly, if we discuss about sportsman his body must be healthiness. Secondly, now a days there different sports in our lives like tennis, chest play, lodo, cricket etc. For example, If we are suffering with any coronial diseases where we are unable to stand or walk than no use of life rather than on the other hand, if we are looking smart in health we are be able to understand the rules of games. Actually, on the other side we can see where the mental condition help us or support to fight against our disabilities in our life. For instance, If we don't have a potential to stand up or take part in different activities mind assist us to play indoor games and make our self-relax. Mind is the one thing where you have a full control in your hand. As per above discussion, according to my opinion mental health play a dynamic role in our survival, rather than physical. Mental stability force the person to think new ideas or thoughts which will facilitate him or her to exist his life. In additionally, he have ability to communicate with others, share their feeling with them and convey their message easily
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that sports are essential for
bodily
power while, others argue that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mental
energy is more necessary. Health is always
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
a chief role in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
rather
its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mental
or physical.

Although,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
trust that looking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
or well-being in front of others you should pay attention on your fitness.
Firstly
, if we discuss about sportsman his body
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be healthiness.
Secondly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
a days there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sports in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
like tennis, chest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
, lodo, cricket etc.
For example
, If we are suffering with any coronial diseases where we are unable to stand or walk than no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
rather
than on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, if we are looking smart in health we are be able to understand the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of games.

Actually, on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
side we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
where the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mental
condition
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us or support to fight against our disabilities in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
For instance
, If we don't have a potential to stand up or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
activities mind assist us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
indoor games and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our self-relax. Mind is the one thing where you have a full control in your hand.

As per above discussion, according to my opinion
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mental
health
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
a dynamic role in our survival,
rather
than physical.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mental
stability force the person to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
or thoughts which will facilitate him or her to exist his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. In
additionally
, he have ability to communicate with others, share their feeling with them and convey their message
easily
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts