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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. v. 1
People have different views of whether the duty of a person is only to pay taxation. While the taxes are crucial to a country, I think that a citizen should do more things for the society. On the one hand, there are two reasons why paying taxes is a way to benefit to society. Firstly, the country relies on that money to keep functionally running. This is because the maintenance of each public section is extremely expensive. Without enough tax income, the regional government will never pass some decisions such a build a new stadium. In addition, those countries which have a higher income can return more to the society. This means better facilities and public services. For example, taxpayers can enjoy faster access to doctors because of their own contribution. On the other hand, I would say that citizens can and should do more things for their own society. This means people should pay the certain amount of taxes, as well as doing more voluntary work and join the army. With the respect to becoming a volunteer, citizens can service others who have a disability. In this way, young adults who find it hard to engage the community can have a better relationship with their neighbours. As far as enrolling into the army is concerned, it seems the most simple way to contribute to the society. In some places like Bagdad, a strong militia power certainly means regional stabilization. In conclusion, I accept that it is vital for taxpayers to take responsibility, but citizens should do more things for their society. Everyone should be involved in more public services to contribute to their own society.
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views of whether the duty of a person is
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to pay taxation. While the
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taxes
are crucial to a country, I
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think
that a
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citizen
should do more things for the society.

On the one hand, there are two reasons why paying
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taxes
is a way to benefit to
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society
.
Firstly
, the country relies on that money to
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keep
functionally
running. This is
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because
the maintenance of each public section is
extremely
expensive. Without
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enough
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tax
income, the regional
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government
will never pass
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some
decisions such a build a new stadium.
In addition
, those countries which have a higher income can return more to the
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society
. This means better facilities and public services.
For example
, taxpayers can enjoy faster access to doctors
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because
of their
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own
contribution.

On the other hand
, I would say that
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citizens
can and should do more things for their
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own
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society
. This means
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people
should pay the certain amount of
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taxes
,
as well
as doing more voluntary work and
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join
the army. With the respect to becoming a volunteer,
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citizens
can service others who have a disability. In this way, young adults who find it
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hard
to engage the community can have a better relationship with their
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neighbours
. As far as enrolling into the army
is concerned
, it seems
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the most simple
way to contribute to the
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society
. In
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some
places like
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Bagdad
, a strong militia power
certainly
means regional stabilization.

In conclusion
, I accept that it is vital for taxpayers to take responsibility,
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but
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citizens
should do more things for their
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society
. Everyone should
be involved
in more public services to contribute to their
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own
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society
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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