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some people think that parents should deal with the bad behaviour of their childer, while otjers think that laws should be made. Discuss both prespective and give your own opinion

some people think that parents should deal with the bad behaviour of their childer, while otjers think that laws should be made. Discuss both prespective and give your own opinion RREeV
It is claimed by a number of individuals that misbehave of the growing buds should be monitored by their birthgivers, while others think that some stringent laws should be enforced to deal with their bad actions. However, in my opinion, children are innocent and should only be monitored by their guradians with great care. To commence with, parents are the best teachers for the young minds. That is to say, younsters spend initial years of their life with their elders, and are more inclined to follow the way taught by mothers and fathers. Thus, parents are responsible for inculcating good habits in the childern and can direct them towards right path with appropriate manner if they commit any mistake, that might not be possible for others than their guradians to do so. A recent survey has shown that about 45% of kinders are properly nurturing by their birthgivers and perfrom wisely in public. However, emotional attachmens between child and parent relationship gives rise to the bad habits of younsters. In other words, parents has blood relation with their young ones which stop them to be harsh or strict with their childern, if they behave badly, and it becomoes compulsory sometimes to punish them for their inappropriate actions. Therefore, including some external authorities to control their such nature is essential. Taking an example of Indians, about 34% of young minds are commiting crimes, and are kept in correctional schools for a definite period of time can give them a better future. In my opinion, childern perfrom mistakes unwillingly and should be supervised with love and care, which can only be done by their parents because they know their wards more closely. Therefore, the onus rests on the shoulder of their care takers to make their younsters a better version of themselves. On balance, the debate of weather the nonsense behaviour of growings buds should be controlled by their bithgivers or law bodies is constantly heating these days. This essay agrees that due to innicent nature of the kinders, they should only be treated by their parents with great care.
It
is claimed
by a number of individuals that misbehave of the growing buds should
be monitored
by their
birthgivers
, while others
think
that
some


stringent
laws should
be enforced
to deal with their
bad
actions.
However
, in my opinion, children are innocent and should
only
be monitored
by their

guradians
with great care.

To commence with,
parents
are the best teachers for the young minds.
That is
to say,
younsters
spend initial years of their life with their elders, and
are


more
inclined to follow the way taught by mothers and fathers.
Thus
,
parents
are responsible for inculcating
good
habits in the
childern
and

can
direct them towards right path with appropriate manner if they commit any mistake, that might not be possible for others than their
guradians
to do
so
.

A recent survey has shown that about 45% of
kinders
are
properly
nurturing by their
birthgivers
and
perfrom
wisely
in public.

However
, emotional
attachmens
between child and
parent
relationship gives rise to the
bad
habits of
younsters
.
In other words
,
parents
has blood
relation


with their young ones which
stop
them to be harsh or strict with their
childern
, if they behave
badly
, and it
becomoes
compulsory
sometimes
to punish

them
for their inappropriate actions.
Therefore
, including
some
external authorities to control their such nature is essential. Taking an example of Indians,

about 34% of young minds are
commiting
crimes, and are
kept
in correctional schools for a
definite
period of time can give them a better future.

In my opinion,
childern
perfrom
mistakes
unwillingly
and should
be supervised
with
love
and care, which can
only
be done
by their
parents
because
they

know their wards more
closely
.
Therefore
, the onus rests on the shoulder of their care takers to
make
their
younsters
a better version of themselves.

On balance, the debate of weather the nonsense
behaviour
of
growings
buds should
be controlled
by their
bithgivers
or law bodies is
constantly
heating

these
days. This essay
agrees
that due to
innicent
nature of the
kinders
, they should
only
be treated
by their
parents
with great care.
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IELTS essay some people think that parents should deal with the bad behaviour of their childer, while otjers think that laws should be made. Discuss both prespective and give your own opinion

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