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Deforestation has become a major issue in certain areas of the world. What are the causes of this? What effects do you think it has on our planet?

Deforestation has become a major issue in certain areas of the world. What are the causes of this? What effects do you think it has on our planet? lL2Jb
Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience. It is more and more obvious that deforestation, in many parts of the world, is caused by citizens, leads to terrible results for the environment. This problem must be tackled because it is a global issue, which affects strongly to human lives. There are numerous reasons for deforestation. First of all, logging industry fells trees in order to get the wood, which is made a lot of useful products for daily life. For example, writing paper, bags, boxes and furniture. Besides that, individuals use them wastefully. People tend to go shopping, carry their purchases home in a paper bag, and then throw the bag away. Secondly, some company need spaces for buildings. Therefore, they cut down trees so as to complete their plans. Less trees in the world may lead to greenhouse effect and global warming. There are several actions that governments could take to solve the problems described above. First, reusing and recycling products from wood might be one of the most effective action of all. For example, after shopping, citizens should save paper bags for the next time instead of throw them away. Moreover, most kinds of household and office paper can be recycled. This can reduce the number of trees be cut down. Second, the governments should increase penalty for illegal logging. For instance, they should increase fines and imprisonment for each illegal action by levels. In conclusion, logging and cutting trees for building are two factors affecting seriously to environment. To deal with this problem, citizens need to use product from wood sparingly and governments should punish illegal logging actions appropriately.
Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in
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many
parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you
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think
can
be done
to solve this problem?

Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your
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own
knowledge and experience.

It is more and more obvious that deforestation, in
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many
parts of the world,
is caused
by citizens, leads to terrible results for the environment. This problem
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must
be tackled
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because
it is a global issue, which affects
strongly
to human
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lives
.

There are numerous reasons for deforestation.
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First of all
,
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logging
industry fells
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trees
in order to
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get
the wood, which
is made
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a lot of
useful products for daily life.
For example
, writing paper,
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bags
, boxes and furniture.
Besides
that, individuals
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use
them
wastefully
.
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People
tend to go shopping, carry their
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purchases
home in a paper
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bag
, and then throw the
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bag
away.
Secondly
,
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some
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company
need spaces for buildings.
Therefore
, they
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cut
down
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trees
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so as to
complete their plans.
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun trees is countable.
Less
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trees
in the world may lead to greenhouse effect and global warming.

There are several actions that
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governments
could take to solve the problems
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described
above.
First
, reusing and recycling products from wood might be one of the most effective
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action
of all.
For example
, after shopping, citizens should save paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
for the
next
time
instead
of throw them away.
Moreover
, most kinds of household and office paper can
be recycled
. This can
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reduce
the number of
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trees
be
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cut
down. Second, the
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governments
should increase penalty for illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
logging
.
For instance
, they should increase fines and imprisonment for each illegal
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action
by levels.

In conclusion
,
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logging
and cutting
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trees
for building are two factors affecting
seriously
to environment. To deal with this problem, citizens need to
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use
product from wood
sparingly
and
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governments
should punish illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
logging
actions
appropriately
.
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IELTS essay Deforestation has become a major issue in certain areas of the world. What are the causes of this? What effects do you think it has on our planet?

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