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Some people think that online education is as effective as school education. Others argue that nothing can replace face to face teaching.

Some people think that online education is as effective as school education. Others argue that nothing can replace face to face teaching. nXXAe
Since the start of time, people only knew traditional ways of gaining knowledge and learning, which was by going to school. However, ways of acquiring knowledge have seen drastic changes especially in the time period of 2019-2021 where the corona virus struck and had everyone quarantined. This led to the popularity of online education in which students had to attend virtual classes in order to continue their curriculum. Some people believe that online education is just as good as traditional classroom instruction. Others argue that nothing can replace one-on-one instruction. Starting off with the conventional way of procuring knowledge, which has been agreed upon internationally as countries and educational systems believe it is the best way of educating people. It is one of the best forms of receiving information since teachers are physically next to the students to guide them personally and strengthen their weak points. For example, the instructor will understand exactly what the student’s problem is since he’ll be physically there seeing the pupil’s work and will show him how to fix it. In addition, traditional school learning develops social and organizational skills in students. Attending physical classes helps them interact socially with their classmates, become proactive, and be better disciplined as they’ll follow a planned schedule. These skills are essential aspects in the real world. Therefore, attending school to receive education is very productive and builds up a child’s character. Moving on to online schooling or e-learning which became popular due to the virus, it has its own advantages and disadvantages. The beneficial side of it was that students felt more comfortable while they’re studying which could’ve led to them grasping the material better. On the other hand, the cons include more distractions and lack of direct interaction. Pupils that have studied online had access to plenty of distractions as a lot of them where on their phones looking at social media and some were even playing video games while doing their virtual classes. In addition, students couldn’t communicate well with the instructor to ask questions about his misconceptions. This makes e-learning very inefficient. In conclusion, I would prefer the traditional methods of schooling as they bring out the best in students. It has worked for me, and I have found it to be more effective than e-schooling since I struggled to understand the material being studied and found myself being less efficient. Therefore, I believe that online education won’t be replacing in-person education anytime soon.
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of gaining knowledge and learning, which was by going to school.
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of acquiring knowledge have
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corona virus
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online
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education
in which
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had to attend virtual classes in order to continue their curriculum.
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as
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as
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traditional
classroom instruction. Others argue that nothing can replace one-on-one instruction.

Starting off with the conventional
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way
of procuring knowledge, which has been
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agreed
upon
internationally
as countries and educational systems believe it is the best
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way
of educating
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people
. It is one of the best forms of receiving information since teachers are
physically
next
to the
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students
to guide them
personally
and strengthen their weak points.
For example
, the instructor will understand exactly what the
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student’s
problem is since he’ll be
physically
there seeing the pupil’s work and will
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show
him how to
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it.
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,
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traditional
school learning develops social and organizational
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skills
in
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students
. Attending physical classes
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helps
them interact
socially
with their classmates, become proactive, and be better disciplined as they’ll follow a planned schedule. These
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skills
are essential aspects in the real world.
Therefore
, attending school to receive
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education
is
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very
productive and builds up a child’s character.

Moving on to
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online
schooling or e-learning which became popular due to the virus, it has its
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own
advantages and disadvantages. The beneficial side of it was that
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students
felt more comfortable while they’re studying which could’ve led to them grasping the material better.
On the other hand
, the cons include more distractions and lack of direct interaction. Pupils that have studied
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online
had access to
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plenty
of distractions as
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a lot of
them where on their phones looking at social media and
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some
were even playing video games while doing their virtual classes.
In addition
,
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students
couldn’t communicate well with the instructor to ask questions about his misconceptions. This
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makes
e-learning
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very
inefficient.

In conclusion
, I would prefer the
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traditional
methods of schooling as they bring out the best in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. It has worked for me, and I have found it to be more effective than e-schooling since I struggled to understand the material
being studied
and found myself being less efficient.
Therefore
, I believe that
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online
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education
won’t be replacing in-person
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education
anytime
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soon
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that online education is as effective as school education. Others argue that nothing can replace face to face teaching.

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