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A 7 day Trip to Berlin with Friends

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Myself and four of my friends experienced a marvellous trip to the city of Berlin last week. The time of visit and the climate made it even more cheerful to literally everyone of us which I would adore to share in this particular blog. We kicked off at the night of 23rd March 2021 from California and reached Berlin at the dawn of 24th March. It was one heck of a climate where the temperature dropped to less than zero and we entailed sweatshirts and boots at the time of landing.
Myself and four of my friends experienced a
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marvellous
trip to the city of Berlin last week. The time of visit and the climate made it even more cheerful to
literally
Did you mean "every one"?
everyone
of us which I would adore to share in this particular blog. We kicked off at the night of 23rd March 2021 from California and reached Berlin at the dawn of 24th March. It was one heck of a climate where the temperature dropped to less than
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
zero and
we entailed sweatshirts and boots at the time of landing.
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IELTS essay A 7 day Trip to Berlin with Friends

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91 words
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