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Some people think that nowadays consumption if fast food is rising the health hazards, so other claims that government should lay higher tax on these products to reduce its consumption.do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that nowadays consumption if fast food is rising the health hazards, so other claims that government should lay higher tax on these products to reduce its consumption. ORqay
Healthy body is an indispensable part of everyone's life. However, the rapid consumption of fast food is escalating the number of health hazards in individuals. So the part of folks assert that the government ought to be imposed the price of junk food. I fully accord this notion due to the various reasons those will be discussed in the subsequent paragraph. To initiate with there are several advantage inclining the rate of junk food. First and foremost, all people might not afford it. As the price will surged then average income people would not prefer to consume it. Also, they have not enough money to buy it where by the main show less interest in these kind of meal. and their use alternative proceeded food. Moreover, health related diseases will be declined If the expenses would be higher on junk food then people may consume other spices, which they can get on economic prices so the health issues such as obesity, diabetes andso on may be reduced. Hence, the intake of junk food will be dropped off. For instance, the survey was conducted by the Oxford University in which witnessed that the 25% people in India has consumed Italian food such as pasta and pizza everyday, which incline the rate of obesity. To conclude, it is inferred from above paragraphs, that the consumption of junk food put a adverse effect on people's health so rising the price of these products the good way to tackle this problem.
Healthy body is an indispensable part of everyone's life.
However
, the rapid consumption of
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fast
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food
is escalating the number of
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health
hazards in individuals.
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So
the part of folks assert that the
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government
ought to
be imposed
the
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price
of
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junk
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food
. I
fully
accord this notion due to the various reasons those will
be discussed
in the subsequent paragraph.

To initiate with there are several advantage inclining the rate of
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junk
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food
.
First
and foremost, all
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people
might not afford it.
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As
the
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price
will
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surged
then average income
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people
would not prefer to consume it.
Also
, they have not
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enough
money to
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buy
it
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where by
the main
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show
less interest in
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of meal.
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and
their
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use
alternative proceeded
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food
.
Moreover
,
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health
related diseases will
be declined
If the expenses would be higher on
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junk
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food
then
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people
may consume other spices, which they can
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get
on economic
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prices
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so
the
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health
issues such as obesity, diabetes
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andso
on may be
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reduced
.
Hence
, the intake of
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junk
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food
will
be dropped
off.
For instance
, the survey
was conducted
by the Oxford University in which witnessed that the 25%
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people
in India has consumed Italian
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food
such as pasta and pizza
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
, which incline the rate of obesity.

To conclude
, it
is inferred
from above paragraphs, that the consumption of
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junk
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food
put
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a
adverse effect on
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people
's
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health
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so
rising the
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price
of these products the
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good
way to tackle this problem.
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IELTS essay Some people think that nowadays consumption if fast food is rising the health hazards, so other claims that government should lay higher tax on these products to reduce its consumption.

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