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The qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any similar academic institution. v. 1

There was an ignited debate in recent years to argue for the importance of educational setting. Opponents to orthodox perspective did believe that the qualities that could pave the way for success were collected from other environments rather than traditional expertise. In my humble opinion, the university has partly contributed to one’s sweet fruits, other required abilities come down from real-life practices. On the one hand, current education systems are in desperate need of being reformed. Despite that fact that the concept that learning is the shortcut to eradicate the gap of the circumstances which one was born was accepted for generations, our education system is way behind on realistic expectations. Only by tackling at the root of imparting wisdom can human lie a new foundation for the next graduates who are obliged to face an endless sea of deadly issues that could treat our survival. For example, more and more universities have included computer science and soft skills in their curriculums no matter what the student's major is. This move could be admitted as education’s failure amid changing realistic expectations in current context. In this light, the sceptics have the rights to declare that higher training does no longer catch the pace of time. On the other hand, learning must be practiced throughout one’s lifetime rather than only in schooling. In fact, learning does not make one learned, or in other words, to be successful. There are those who have knowledge and those who have understanding. The first requires memory and the second philosophy. Therefore, a person has to be armed with a comprehensive understanding that it is the combination of practical experiences and recognition schooled in educational settings to be the best way leading to the final success. For instance, Edmond Dantes in the Count of Monte Cristo who actually had enjoyed a two-year of training with an Italian priest, Faria, did learn other important abilities by experiencing various lives to eventually reach his most precious success: to forgive the life and to forgive himself also. For learning is a relentless quest, each individual is obliged to cultivate practical qualities that aims to support his goals every day in life, even as the schooling was over, instead of depending on the knowledge learned in school. In conclusion, there is a widening gap between higher study and a realistic expectation that forces the authority to pay attention. I firmly believe that humans today do no longer depend on the knowledge impacted by universities to become successful.

IELTS essay The qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

There was an ignited debate in recent years to argue for the importance of educational setting. Opponents to orthodox perspective did believe that the qualities that could pave the way for success
were collected
from other environments
rather
than traditional expertise. In my humble opinion, the university has partly contributed to one’s sweet fruits, other required abilities
come
down from real-life practices. On the one hand,
current
education
systems are in desperate need of
being reformed
. Despite that fact that the concept that learning is the shortcut to eradicate the gap of the circumstances which one
was born
was
accepted
for generations, our
education
system is way behind on realistic expectations.
Only
by tackling at the root of imparting wisdom can human lie a new foundation for the
next
graduates who
are obliged
to face an endless sea of deadly issues that could treat our survival.
For example
, more and more universities have included computer science and soft
skills
in their curriculums no matter what the student's major is. This
move
could
be admitted
as
education’s
failure amid changing realistic expectations in
current
context. In this light, the
sceptics
have the rights to declare that higher training does no longer catch the pace of time.
On the other hand
, learning
must
be practiced
throughout one’s lifetime
rather
than
only
in schooling. In fact, learning does not
make
one learned, or
in other words
, to be successful. There are those who have knowledge and those who have understanding. The
first
requires memory and the second philosophy.
Therefore
, a person
has to
be armed
with a comprehensive understanding that it is the combination of practical experiences and recognition schooled in educational settings to be the best way leading to the final success.
For instance
, Edmond
Dantes
in the Count of Monte
Cristo
who actually had enjoyed a two-year of training with an Italian priest,
Faria
, did learn other
important
abilities by experiencing various
lives
to
eventually
reach his most precious success: to forgive the life and to forgive himself
also
. For learning is a relentless quest, each individual
is obliged
to cultivate practical qualities that aims to support his goals every day in life, even as the schooling was over,
instead
of depending on the knowledge learned in school.
In conclusion
, there is a widening gap between higher study and a realistic expectation that forces the authority to pay attention. I
firmly
believe that humans
today
do no longer depend on the knowledge impacted by universities to become successful.
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